Tantris Onara: Review Request from missterious

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Story Link: =D <3




Title Grab :[10/10]

STILL No idea what it means. But it does make it sound mysterious. ^^



Foreword/Description: [8/10]

You made it short and simple.  Sweet =D xD
Good job my friend. =3


Storyline/Flow: [22/30]

The chapters are a bit too short, you should have spacing =3! Allows the reader to read more easily but other than that its okay. You story features yuri, I adore you for that... there arent ALOT of people on aff who like /yuri... so sad... I have a story similar to yours =3 but it you are welcome to check it out ^^



Characters: [26/30]

Good job on character portrayal ^^ Keep at it!!! I at writing and portaying characters D=

But still GOOD JOB =D BETTER THAN ME XD



Laughs/Bonuses/Extras: [20/20]

You have some laughs here and there and its good ^^

You got da art and everything <3 very creative i loves it =3 <3



Overall : [86/100] a  B GOOD JOB <3

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CrazyFujoshi
#1
Oh It Seems That Your Reviewings On Hold. But Of You Spared The Time When You Get Back Could You Review My First Fanfic. Its A Kaisoo Oneshot. Thanks http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/806817 :)
KlMJONGIN
#2
Is this shop still open? o.e
xxinverted
#3
I know you're on hold, but when you're not, please take a look at this ^^ I haven't gotten a lot of reviews because it's my first fic and I just started on it, but I'd like to have someone as worthy as you to take a look at it and critique it, please :D

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/171685/blinded-but-by-what-2ne1-dara-jonghyun-key-shinee-you-2shinee1
missterious
#4
up and running with the update :) could you add my story link here, i think you forgot it? lol.
missterious
#5
hey there, it looks like you lost some of your review chapters wen AFF crashed. i actually had your chapter 7 because i copy-pasted it into my fic as a chapter, and was able to retrieve it from my cache :)

here is your credit, and feel free to repost in your shop. right now my hotlink to your original review won't work, but if you add back a 7th chapter, it will :)

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/79224/6
ilikekpop #6
I will ask u to review once i get my poster ^^
So i subscribed already lol
ilikekpop #7
I want to ask u oppa, but i'm afraid lol
U hate my grammar XD
and i'm waiting for a poster ^^
Excited lol
lovekpop55
#8
LadyComma
#9
Thanks for my review! ^^
LadyComma
#10
DP means display picture lol, don't feel bad, it took me a while to figure out its meaning too >.< By the way, I subscribed to your story because I think it's going to be AWESOME and plus you have some amazing photos of my biases on there lol ^0^