Chapter 1: Seeing the title, I reckoned that this story will be in the scale of a story with the dash of "technicality" into it...and it was.

Another thing was that this story would've been better with more background on the whole scenario within the story. I see the first phase of the whole affection thing but it would've been better to elaborate it further.

All in all, good fic :)

Chapter 1: SUPER cute!! I love the cinnamon bun reveal at the end, it was such a sweet and dorky touch. It really showed Mingyu's personality, and you could tell that Wonwoo was touched by the gesture. I'm torn between feeling that there could have been more and feeling like it ended in the perfect place. I feel like if there had been an awkward and sudden confession at the end it would have been too much too soon. I do like when oneshots have open endings so I don't mind that overall. Maybe if there had been more of a backstory with how often Wonwoo comes in or the first time Mingyu met him? How long has he been working at the coffee shop? Background info like that can sometimes help open endings feel more robust and satisfying because it helps you guess at what could come next. Overall, I thought this story was super cute. I also liked some of the formatting choices you made with the centered texts, it added a nice touch.

Chapter 1: Heh. It’s so cute. Wish there was more though. Great job authornim!

Chapter 1: ASDFJKL I'M PRACTICALLY SWOONING OVER HERE CAN YOU HEAR THE SOUND OF A GIRL SQUEALING LIKE A DEAD SEAL OVER HERE YUP THAT'S ME OMGBBQWTF SOMEBODY HOLD ME-
I don't like first-person stories and don't normally read them, but something about your fanfic just kinda stand out and seem different from the rest of the first-person stories I've seen.
I especially like how you took the opportunity of using first-person to convey Minyu's thoughts. He's so cute and so funny omg my heart *clenches heart* This is one of the good things about first-person that most writers fail to incorporate: They have the ability to make things funny with the minds of their characters, not just only see through their eyes. Our mind is always running with a million thoughts, and it's nice to see what are some of the random thoughts that pop up in a person's mind.
Do I make sense? Hopefully I do, but probably not-

Anyway, this was an excellent fanfic and nicely written, me likey! <3

Chapter 1: Mingyu is just too cute and too clumsy for someone his height xD

Chapter 1: Awww, so cute, so sweet, I melted... Story is good!!

Chapter 1: It was really good, I liked how inside of Mingyu's head we were, and it was really cute to see him gush over wonwoo. Good job ^^

Chapter 1: I really like Mingyu's character. He's adorable when he's gushing internally over his crush and struggling. Personally, as an onlooker, I'm ironically being charmed Mingyu when he's looking at the one he adores. You made good use of the first person POV especially because it provided the readers direct insight on Mingyu's character. We also got to have a nice insight on Minghao's character based on Mingyu's carefulness around him.

The one thing that is maybe a bit lacking for me is an insight on Wonwoo. You know, besides the physical. Maybe Mingyu could mention a few flashbacks on when and why he started having a crush on Wonwoo, enough that it would make him keep working in a cafe even though he hates coffee?

But really, that's just something to spice things up and make your story more engaging. It's understandable that some things would be left untold because it's in one character's POV only and in reality, you wouldn't naturally justify your feelings about something that's always been there every single time you come across it.

So yep. Overall, this is so nicely written and is quickly added to my list of faves this week. Looking forward to your next entries! :)

Chapter 1: Asdfghjkl!! ლ(*꒪ヮ꒪*)ლ This is so sweet!!!! I don't usually like first person narrative because too often they end up sounding narcissistic ^^; but you did a really great job and avoided that! And it was very easy to like Mingyu! His awkwardness was really cute (＾ヮ＾)b

My favorite line was "You have the subtlety of a chainsaw." I laughed so hard! .·´¯`(⌒ヮ⌒)´¯`·.