Strange and Unreal

Lunar Rainbows (Full Version)
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"Unreal" Sinb muttered under her breath

 

Simple word to describe the things her eyes is seeing right now. A place that she can hardly describe and she definitely knows that it isn't the home where she belongs.

 

Everything seems old. The place around her, the traditional houses and more people wearing their traditional dresses. Her mind is now more confused and she was seriously frustrated.

 

"This place....could it be that..?" She turned her head to look at the goddess who brought her there but she suddenly disappeared, she has gone.

 

"Oh? where is she again?" She asks hersef. "I asked her to bring me back home, but she brought me here instead. Is she really a trustful creature in this world?" She continues talking to herself until the kids who were playing around noticed her.

 

"Am I seeing this true? Isn't it Shawing!" A kid exclaimed and the others follows where his index finger is pointing at.

 

"Shawing! She's back! Shawing is back!" They said loudly as they all run towards Sinb who was currently wandering around. 

 

"Shawing! Shawing!" Sinb heard that familiar name, she can't actually remember when did she hear that name before but when she turn around to check to whom that name belongs, she saw some kids running towards her.

 

Excitedly and happily, those kids runs towards her with their arms wide open and ready to hug her as soon as they reach her. She can't move an inch, seeing the smiles on those innocent kids, she felt like she finally met some human being after a week of wondering on a place with a mysterious goddess who keeps on following her. 

 

"Shawing's back!" , "She's alive and well, she finally came back"

 

The kids gathered around her "Shawing" They kept on saying that name in front of her, they called her Shawing. And there she remember the goddess, that was the same name she called her the first time she met her. 

 

Some people came to gather around her, some questions are being thrown but she can't understand anything since it was too loud. She felt like she's a celebrity at first but the more people that gather, the more she gets annoyed.

 

Calling her Shawing doesn't even make her feel good, she already know that something wrong was going on for everyone to call her on that name. She turns her head left and right, trying to find

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yupupddin #1
Chapter 4: Please i need the next chapter!
prod_GLEE
#2
Chapter 1: Ooh... such a mysterious start. I'm assuming that Yuju is the source of that voice echoing in Sinb's head when she was sleeping (and ain't that scary already? it's like in horror movie haha especially with the darkness stuff XD). But jokings aside, I like the way you keep us hanging with the last scene. So apparently, Yuju (with the hanbok) has finally returned to meet with Sinb! Usually in movies, we see that important events happen when the sky was roaring with thunder and lightnings so it was pleasant to read something like that in fiction haha.
She's wearing hanbok, so I assume this is going to be a time travel fantasy story? Ooh I'm a er for this genre honestly XD
There are already a lot of questions in my head now. Whether if Sinb's obsession with capturing lunar rainbow has to do anything with the plot or it's just her passion. Whether if Sinb had a past life or not, etc.
The plot aspect is working great for me, but not quite the writing style. It's not about grammar (yours is good and you just have to proofread a bit and all should be fine!), not about your narration (it was nice and easy to follow) but it's about the presentation? Like how you make two(?) empty lines to separate each one-to-three-sentence paragraph doesn't work that well for me. Usually we do that to cut different scenes making the transitions less surprising to readers so in your case, you should consider making paragraphs longer and only separating that way when the transition really needs to take place (if that makes sense?)

I've never read a Gfriend story before and I'm not exactly a part of the fandom (though I do adore Yuju the multi-talented and Sinb the ice princess and they are my favs in GF actually) but I hope you still welcome me to read your story :)
SHINeeMe08
#3
Chapter 4: Woah this is a great story...haha sinb get annoyed at her other name,"Shawing" haha
haraeyul
#4
Chapter 4: Hahaha I'm laughing at that loosen screw parts XD that's my joke with my siblings tho XD HHaha and you're spoiling about Yuju author ah... It'll be more mystery if you didn't reveal about Yuju in future XD HAHAHA BTW, I'm not a lover of supernatural story but I'm starts to love reading it with this ff. Wanna know why? The answer is just one, because the actress in here are Gfriend and not a cocky guy with a beard that can attract any girl who fall in love by just seeing his beard *rolled my eyes* XD HAHAHAH

P's. Don't mind my ridiculous and unrelated rant. Idk what's going on with me this lately XD
RedSapph
#5
Chapter 4: I don't know if I should hate Yewon or not :3
LoonPrincess #6
Chapter 3: Love it!
RedSapph
#7
Chapter 3: "Did you take drugs? Are you sure the screws on your brain aren't loose?" am I the only one who understand this? XD and "SinB - rookie lawyer" I remember Because she is Eomma lol
You really spoil us about Yuju author-nim!
RedSapph
#8
Chapter 2: Like haraeyul author-nim, I just found this because of the recommendation XD but I read the one in SinJu collection though
Cucumberbaby
#9
Sinju squad is here
haraeyul
#10
I found this ff after reading your recommended in your other ff XD but i'll not read it for now (busy *heavy sigh*) but i'll read it once i've out from this busy life ^_^ btw, hwaiting!