R[R] AnnaAliah
ILARIA - MULTISHOP -ARCHIVE - B&R - 8AnnaAliah (Aug 6, 2016 09:36:42) says about chapter 3: x
Author's name: AnnaAliah
Author's link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/583966
Story title: Only Memories
Story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1155773/only-memories-angst-hunhan-taoris-baekyeol-kaisoo-xiuchen-sulay
Main characters: EXO MAIN COUPLES (KAISOO/HUNHAN/SULAY/TAORIS/BAEKYEOL/XIUCHEN)
Poster link: http://i.imgur.com/R8RN4qq.png
Description:-
It has been two years since everything.
But some things never change and some other things change too much.
It's all based on luck and how they deal with it.
There aren't always happy ending in someone's life, right?
Genre: Angst + A little bit of fluff
Rated: PG-13
Reviewer: LoveChan4Eva
Password: Butterfly
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TItle: 3/5
THe title was not very captivating. Only memories sound vague. It could be either a love story, tragedy, etc. Only memories can work for most kind of stories, and mostly indicate tragedy. There was barely any relations from the title to story as I can see.
Forward/ Description : 7/10
The forward has grammatical errors. For someone to be hooked into the story, it mostly depends on the forward. If you have errors in the forward, readers will expect errors throughout the story also. Also, the forward sentences don't go along with each other, each standing for a different meaning.
It's all based on luck and how they deal with it.
There aren't always happy ending in someone's life, right?
These two sentences have no relations, also there are diffficulties with the grammar.
There aren't always happy endings in a person's life, right? would have sounded much better.
Plot: 15/25
Somehow, the plot was a little unrealistic. If Tao and Kris have loved each other, or something in that sense, Tao would not have bashed him when Kris left because he was hurting in Exo, then eventually regret it. There is not really a distinct plot, just little sad drabbles about each of the member's loneliness (besides Kai and Baekhyun) made into one story. The events was basically copy, pasting, and tweaking, making it from angst to predictable events. There was no of any sort, making this story a little plain. The plot idea is great. Usually, I dislike short story with no details, same goes with this story's amount of words. There are little plot holes, as as what Tao said about Kris. People who does not know about what Tao said about the departure of Kris might be confused so you should add on to that. You also should say how Kai's relationship with Kyungsoo changed, and Baekhyun's current relationship with Chanyeol or past. The short amount of words make the story seems empty.
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