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Don't Lie, My Love.

"Great job, Hyunmi!" said the chemistry teacher, Mrs Yuna. Hyunmi painted a smile.

"I'm hoping that you guys can make Hyunmi as an example, she's one of the best student in our school." the teacher praised her. She took her bag and the books.

"Okay class, see you tomorrow." she said. The students started to pack their books into their bags. They quickly left the classroom. Only Hyunmi and her bestfriend still remained in classroom. Hyunmi walked to Baekhyun with a cute smile.

"Hey, are you gonna walk home with me today?" she asked.

"Of course." he replied then stood up. He smiled at Hyunmi. She could feel a warm feeling inside while looking at Baekhyun.

"Let's go" he said.

Both of them walked their way home together, since their houses were at the same street. They were talking to each other. 

Hyunmi bit her lower lips. She actually liked Baekhyun, since long time ago. She wasn't a shy girl but when it comes to feelings and love, she really shy. She thought some senteces in her head to confess her feelings to Baekhyun. She didn't even listen to what Baekhyun talking about.

"Hyunmi?" Baekhyun called her name. Hyunmi was shocked.

"Uh, y-yes?" she replied clumsily.

"What are you thinking about right now?" he asked curiously.

"Um, just nothing.." she said with a smile.

"Are you sure?" he asked again. Hyunmi replied quickly with a nod "yes!"

"Oh okay then." he said. 

"I have to do this." she said in her heart.

"Um, Baekhyun.." she called his name.

"Yes?" he quickly replied.

"Uh, I...I" she stuttered suddenly.

"You?" Baekhyun looked at her curiously.

"I really like you." she said. Her heart was beating faster. Both of them stopped besides the street. 

"I like you too" he replied.

"I mean, I like you more than being a friend.." she confessed. She looked deeply in his eyes. Baekhyun looked at her in disbelief.

"What do you mean?" he asked. 

"I love you." she said then looked away. She was shy.

"I.." 

"I don't really interested to be more than friends.. I'm sorry.." he said with a smile. Hyunmi bit her lips.

"Oh, okay. " Hyunmi tried to paint a smile back. She held her tears.
"I'm sorry, Hyunmi.." Baekhyun said and tried to hold her hands but Hyunmi walked away.

"Hyunmi!" he shouted her name.

"I'm fine, Its okay." she replied. Tears were falling down her rosy cheeks. She wiped it quickly. 

 

She looked at her back, Baekhyun was gone. He didn't even try to persuade her or anything, but left her instead? She couldn't believe this. She arrived at her house.

"I'm home." she said then locked herself in her room.

"Hyunmi, let's lunch together!" said her mother while knocking her door.

"I'm full." she replied. 

"Oh, okay honey" she said.

 

Hyunmi cried alone. She took a pillow and hugged it. She was hurting by her own bestfriend. 

"Maybe, I shouldn't have to confess to him..but it's too late" she said then cried again.
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Sorry if there some grammar mistakes because i'm still learning and improving it ^^ 

 

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Blu3Wind
#1
Chapter 3: I really like the storylinee!! Like it's so simple, but the feeling is there~ woohyun is too sweet.. That sudden kiss thoughhh.. Kyaaaaa~~ makes me feel so embarrassed and i was all smiling just reading it >.<

Baek hyun is still... So mean >:( how can he ignore her, block her, be with another girl, and then say he still loves her? Nooo! Woohyun is much better!!! And yeah everytime woohyun said "baby" my heart also stopped beating. Hahahahha!

This is so cutee! I also really like the "the coldness from ghe rain felt warn" description btw. Good job!! It evokes the emotion really well :)
Blu3Wind
#2
Chapter 2: Oh wowww Baek Hyun is so mean here!! Poor Hyunmi, i wouldve cried too. How could he get a new gf so fast?!?!
But the best part was Key!! Hahahhahahah how can he just gather some friends for her to choose from. And when she said no, he just told them they can leave. Lollll so entertaining xD
Woohyun is so sweet and cheesy i love it!! I think i was actually blushing at every line he said. Hehehhe.. But seriously Key, how can u so easily believe woohyun when hyunmi just said she isnt interested in anyone? XD
Aww woohyun still so sweet! That's right! Make baekhyun regret! XD
foreverhappy218
#3
Chapter 4: Awwww, so cute! ♡
ihateyoujimin #4
Chapter 2: WOW Woohyun is such a teaser..
hazledrazle #5
Chapter 3: I LOVE IT!! i want to be Hyunmi so muchhhh!!!
Blu3Wind
#6
Chapter 1: Awwww baekhyun is so mean!!! Poor Hyunmi!! T_T he mustve felt so awkward too.. Thank you for updating so fastt!! I really like it alreadyyy

Since you said you are improving,I wanna help give some pointers that maybe you can consider? This is all really to help you out, and i hope it wont offend you >.< cause we did promise one of the benefit of joining this is to help u with ur writing too. Though i am definitely not the best, so we can learn together :)

First, the pacing of the words and sentences are really important. There is a rule called "show, don't tell." It would be nice if you show the readers what you are imagining in your head and try your best to describe the scene.

For example with the conversations or the rejection, you can make it more dramatic and sad by adding more details. Imagine the character perspective. Maybe the blue sky suddenly turned dark and clouded in her vision. Is there maybe something she did with her hands to avoid the awkwardness? Like she can fiddle her fingers together. Any kind of movement that shows she regrets her confession.
For example..
Tell: She was sad.
Show: the tear escaped her eyes, her fingers were shaking though she tried her best to keep them still while holding her bag strap. She avoided looking at him, looking down to her feet. She could only hear her small sniffing now.

Like these are really simple non descriptive and non fancy words. But using different sense (like feel, sight, hearing, smell, etc) also helps to describe emotion. I'm sorry if i'm rambling too much.. These are some things j learned when i took writing class and it reaaally helped mento improve. So I hope that this is able to help you out too. I'm so sorry if it offends u.

Anywayyy i really like the start of the storyy and cant wait for moreee~ thank u so much for writing <3