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Jisoo's gloves had been made of the finest leather, soft and supple but strong and protective. Now they were covered in blood stains that he knew he could never get out, so with a sigh, he tucked them into his saddlebag with the intent to see if any of the soldiers wanted them. Then he finished removing the saddle from his mare and handed it off to a nearby servant. As he took up a brush to begin to groom his mare, he felt eyes on him, and looked up to see Jeonghan watching him.

Curiousity was written all over the immortal's features, in the downward quirk of his thin lips and the tiny crease between his thick brows, but mainly in the almond shaped eyes that were focused on Jisoo's hands. "You are surprising, Squirrel," he said slowly.

"How so?" After a day of moving pieces of dead animals around and checking them closely for clues as to their demise, Jisoo was too spent to argue against the nickname. His hands moved in the familiar rythym of grooming, the one holding the brush sliding down his horse's body, followed closely by the other, holding a rag to smooth her hair down. It was a comfortable routine, relaxing even, but from the way Jeonghan watched him, it was totally foreign to the immortal.

It took Jeonghan a long time to respond, his slender hands fluttering as if he were trying to grasp the words out of thin air. Much as how Jisoo had seen him grasp magic, though that thought came unbidden. "You're just... different than I expected a human lordling to be, I guess."

Dropping the brush and rag into a bucket, Jisoo picked it up and stepped out of his horse's stall, latching the gate behind him before turning to the immortal. "And how did you expect me to be? Pampered and silly, with a love of money and power and unwilling to get my hands dirty?" The guilty look on Jeonghan's face said that he was too close to the truth, and Jisoo shook his head and gave a huff of frustration. "That idea might be more similar in other holdings, but not here. The Marches aren't easy lands, nor are they rich lands. The lords of the Marches are warriors, always have been and always will be; if something needs to be done, it is the Marcher Lord's duty to set the example for his men. It's really that simple."

Jeonghan cocked his head to the side as he studied Jisoo, a tiny smile forming over his thin lips. "Admirable," he finally said, the word catching Jisoo by surprise. He had more been expecting disbelief or something about how lords were meant to rule, not serve, or whatever it was that Namjoo tended to spew about. She was too set in the ways of the Reaches, where lords told their people what to do and never dirtied their own hands, and so when Jeonghan's word broke through his realization, he turned to give the immortal a surprised look.

He was met only with a shrug, though he was beginning to realize that Jeonghan tended to do that a lot. "I have never seen a ruler work alongside his men as you and your father did today," he admitted slowly, then motioned to Jisoo's side. "May I walk with you?"

"Um," Jisoo began to tell him that he was just heading to his rooms, but then Jeonghan glanced up at him, almost shyly meeting his eyes, and Jisoo's heart missed a beat. Oh hells, he was gorgeous. How had he not realized it before? "Yes, of course," he said, his mouth suddenly dry.

As they fell into step beside one another, he asked the safest question that he could think of, anything to keep himself from calling the other beautiful. "So am I the first lordling you have met? Aren't you... um... uh..." How to call one ancient without offending?

Jeonghan snickered, the sound shocking from a being so poised, but the glee in his eyes almost made Jisoo join in with the mirth. "I am not very old at all, Jisoo. Many Children would still consider me a babe, unfortunately. I am only forty!"

Only... "Wow."

Jeonghan's wry glance at his face forced him to elaborate. "I mean, um, yes, you're much younger than I thought," he stuttered hoping that he didn't offend inadvertantly. Apparently he hadn't, because Jeonghan once again shrugged and nodded.

"Yes, well, that's why Honored Heechul insisted on bringing me along. I am younger and so might be able to understand you humans a bit better than he can, while he can also teach me about you all as we travel so that I can learn more of your customs." Yet another shrug. "Besides that, he is my instructor in the art, and so I am bound to him for another three years."

"Magic, you mean," Jisoo said. He could still see them in his mind, the two immortals standing above the valley of the dead, their hands raised and their faces serene as they murmured w

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My Seventeen prequel now has a title... "Cruel Magic". I will be starting the story soon, I hope you all enjoy it!

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DGNA_Forever
#1
Chapter 6: <span class='smalltext text--lighter'>Comment on <a href='/story/view/1082250/6'>Epilogue</a></span>
This ending was nice, but also a little sad. I hope that Jeonghan will be able to heal and trust Seungcheol enough to let him in. I look forward to continuing this in The Seal of Light.
DGNA_Forever
#2
Chapter 5: I wasn't expecting this to happen, but I think Jisoo handled it as well as possible. He was also sweet to realize the way he had treated Namjoo. Now I'm so curious about who killed his family and also if he will be able to fix things with Jeonghan.
DGNA_Forever
#3
Chapter 1: I like the world you have created here, and I'm excited to read more as the story progresses. I feel bad for Jisoo, who seems to be very unhappy in his current situation. The squirrel nickname cracked me up, too.
Amalya
#4
Chapter 6: *wipes at tears in my eyes* Beautifully summed up indeed. And excellently explained. Oh the irony of how things ended up with Youngsaeng's relationship to Jisoo as well as Seungcheol. XD Great tie in for explaining a couple things from the end of TSoL as well. And I'm very glad to see what Jeonghan decided at the end here. I figured he would realize what Jisoo had done and why, and I'm happy to see that they were both able to come to terms with it.

I'm slightly upset over Heechul's role in all of that, and the result of his trial/sentencing, but that too was very believable. If disappointing and annoying. -_- But well done overall indeed. This was a joy to read and I'm quite pleased with how everything has ended, including the story of TSoL and all that. ;) Bravo lady! <3
Amalya
#5
Chapter 5: Oh, those cutting words. They were expected after everything that happened, but as Jisoo also realized, they still hurt very much. I know I expected something tragic to happen but that was not what I was anticipating, and I applaud you for that twist that wholly upset everything in the story. Cruel but believable, harsh but necessary for his character to remain, you pulled that off beautifully and redeemed Namjoo's character from everything else that we'd been led to believe about her from Jisoo. Nicely done, my dear. And after all his struggling against duty, I can only admire Jisoo as he has realized what he can and cannot do now that it has come to this. Even as you break my heart, you make me feel proud of him, even in this sorrowful time. Poor dears, all around. *sniffs*

This certainly helps me see how Jeonghan might have been changed by such an encounter and why he is such a vastly different character in the story that follows. Quite believable but oh so sad at the same time. I am curious to see how you will wrap everything up now though. As well as why the Immortals wouldn't allow Mages at the wedding. But that is a question for another time, and it may well have been answered in the SoL. Ah well. On to the final piece!
Amalya
#6
Chapter 4: Well then! Things are certainly progressing quickly. O.o I had not expected that development exactly. Their relationship feels like that of infatuated younglings discovering passion for the first time. And considering Jeonghan is 'only' forty, I'd believe it. There's no getting around that things between them have moved at a fast rate, but at the same time, they do seem rather meant for each other. The level of comfort and ease they experience around each other isn't something that usually happens so quickly, but I fear what it will also mean for them a bit later. Especially with that look from Namjoo...

And Jisoo's reaction in the dining hall was completely believable and understandable. I'd be pissed off too if I wouldn't be able to say farewell to a favored sibling of mine either. >.> I also liked that you only implied what happened after. It seems to fit things better in this instance. The knowing is all that is necessary and the showing I think could diminish the moment. Nicely done. But I still fear what may happen next. It is rare when things continue perfectly from this point in a story. haha

Onward to the next chapters! :D
Amalya
#7
Chapter 2: I know I didn't comment on the first chapter but you are off to a fantastic beginning. I'm thoroughly delighted that your characters live and breathe and, while Jeonghan could come off as slightly patronizing, he's also incredibly amusing and endearing in other ways. haha Jisoo is certainly a brat but he's also quite tolerable and has his own amusing moments as well. lol I do rather enjoy all the more up front characters at the moment, and while I feel bad for Namjoo and Jisoo in their arranged marriage positions, I don't think she deserves such disregard. Or course, it does go along with his character so far.

I'm far more curious about how Jisoo and Jeonghan are going to get along in the future. And I'm doubly intrigued about this slaughtered sheep business. Hmm. They sound like demons indeed. But time will tell. It was nice to see that even immortals can be surprised a bit by 'mere' humans and Jisoo's response about his father's reaction made me crack a smile.

As usual, your descriptions are lovely. I can see pretty much everything beautifully as I read along, and that scene with the lacquer in Jisoo's bedroom was a nice touch indeed. ;) I do find it ironic it took us to chapter 2 to learn Jeonghan's name but it also makes a certain kind of sense. I'm also delighted to see Heechul here. ^_^ You've got me curious so on to the next bit!
Sarissa
#8
Chapter 5: No. NO. NOOOOOOOO. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO. I CAN'T- I MEAN - NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO. NOPE. I CAN'T. FIND ME IN FIFTY YEARS, BECAUSE I AM NOT OVER THIS.

...I'm just gonna go cry in a corner and wallow in my agonizing misery. Bye.
faithful-lie
#9
Chapter 6: Omg so I KNEW fròm the title I just knew it from the beginning that it couldn't end well I just had that sense of impending doom you know? When things just seem inevitable and you can just predict the drop off the cliff that is to come BUT I WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT !
Honestly, the way you built them up was so skilled, with a delicate hand haha it didn't feel forced that they fell together like that so kudos! And omg those hinted scenes just saying that if you ever write those I'd totally be here for that *.* lol but per year me aside, let's go back to your writing. I expected to hate Namjoo but somehow you never quite made her the enemy and in the end she turn out okay *confused* But to me, the most important thing was that I liked this. So much so that I just couldn't put it down and I had to keep reading the next bit right up until I was done and the disappointment at having finished something awesome set in ;) the ending was so unexpected and the epilogue just felt kind of bleak and sad despite the hopes for Jeonghan set up at the end. It was heavy with loss I suppose... An awesome read thank you so much <3
Kara-Melodie
#10
Chapter 6: So I suppose the question is, why would that person order and orchestrate the wedding murder? Was that person after something or spurned and jealous? Curious minds want to know. *grins* (well, ok, I want to know... hehehe) *trying to avoid spoiling it for others*