Story title: [Adventures of] i
Story link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/475406/
Author: Chrissyxx
Genre: Comedy, crack, romance
status: chaptered (13) and ongoing

Title-[4/5]: So, at first, I was wondering what the title’s relationship with the plot. Then I dived in the plot and look what I found? Interesting, beautiful, y, and totally badass connection. Yeah. For the first few chapters, there were hints, then shifting to the development of the plot, “I FOUND IT!”

Well, yeah. Though, it is the only beginning, I give you an applause, since the title is really creative and very weird in some ways that it could pull you in without you knowing that much. Yep. *applauds*

Design (Poster, font colour/style etc.)- [9/10]: The poster is crispy creative! The combination of colours and the curve is mainly balanced together with the pics that portrayed the genres quite friendly. [Note: It could have been changed into a better one, but I like this one. So yeah.] Though, I wouldn’t say the same for the font colour and style. It could have been changed into a better one and instead of yellow, it could be lanky maroon or something. Not just yellow or was it orange something? Well, aside from that, all is well and yep, thumbs up for the poster! Now for the design of the story, I must say that it’s pretty entertaining and definitely a style to look forward to. Though, it may be quite quirky…I’m gonna say that it fits well for the genre also. *cheers for you*

Foreword/Description (can they hook the reader in?)-[9/10]: For a crack-comedy story, one must have a great, entertaining and a black hole of a description. And after seeing yours, it hooked me up quite easily and I give 9/10 because of that. I don’t enjoy much a crack fic and I don’t usually got a hold of it, but when I saw yours; I knew it’s different. A bit similar to what I have read some time back then, but I saw the best in yours. *smiles* Tao is quite grumpy, huh? *laughs*

*black hole-means that up, or pulls one in /I don’t want you to get the wrong idea/

Characters-[19/20]: Let’s settle for the characters, hm? I’ll keep it short. I must say that you really did a good job on the characters, especially twisting their personalities and of playing them so well. You did a good job on their interactions and no one was left out. Even the cameos weren’t left out that much. Others would rarely hold them up, but you got your characters lined up and thumbs up for you! Just a tip of advice, don’t play them around too much, put a bit of a steel on them then go back to the old ways. After all, it is a crack-comedy fic.

Originality-[5/5]: Yep. Enough said. Originality at its best. I haven’t encountered others like this before, so yep, 5/5. *grins*

Flow-[19/20]: The flow is nice. Like really. Somehow, like a breeze ruffling the rose along the stream. And there are rocks. Yes. So, what I’m trying to tell you is that, the story’s pace is neither quick nor slow. Just neutral as it is. Since, the flow is neutral, there are rocks. Considering your title, it is an adventure, correct? Of i. i rather revolved into something, quite noticeable, yet subtle at the same time, right? So considering that, the first 13 chapters were their lives and also the beginning of the i. A bit slow, but I would take the matter in the objective view. So let us say that the ‘adventure’ and that first 13 chapters were a warm-up and the adventure includes the warm-up and the spontaneous lives of the policemen, barista, rich kid and a techno cross owner of the highly forced life of being the CEO of i. Get, what I mean? Neutral. Just plain neutral. :)

Grammar/Spelling-[23/25]: Soooooooo, I checked up your other reviews, and I must say, I agree on their part. They have pretty much summed up what I have to say. It’s not the grammar that we have a problem, but rather the punctuations and some parts of the spellings plus the highly conditional cases of unnecessary parts, yet still needed there. So yep, that’s what I saw throughout ^^

Overall Enjoyment-[5/5]: Two words. Damn Gorgeous.

Bonus-[5/5]: You deserve it. Like really. ^^

Total-[98/105]= 93%

Extra Comment: And so….I’m sorry for being late. Got hold up with some things. But here you go! ^-^ The story is truly fun and enjoyable to read. Not a minute of waste.  Thank you for your patronage and good luck with your story!