The Secret within the Lanky Boy-Roochi

Story Title (3/5): The title isn't that much of a connection to the plot, a bit vague and lost. I noticed that you changed your title from The Summer of the Lanky Boy to The Secret within the Lanky Boy. (I don't know if I got your previous title right, but somehow it feels that way) The past title presented a feeling of connection to the plot, somehow giving a feeling of what it seems like the summer of the lanky boy, or probably  the feeling of 'being with the lanky boy until summer' or vice versa. It had that feeling and regarding about your present title, it's fine, really. Showing a few sides of the plot, but doesn't really show much of the front and back view of the plot. The present title has this showing of mostly the 'lanky boy', a few sprinkle of confettis to provide a great view of the opening or probably about Sungyeol. It almost have an impact, but somehow, it didn't give much of that an impact to the plot itself. 

Appearance (7/10): Mingled with symphonic arts and a bit poetic-like feeling, the genres and the wordings closely resembles, but not much. The genres distributed themselves finely throughout the story, maintained and clicked. Regarding about the appearance of the plot and others seems to be a little twisted. Corrections are needed and a bit more scenes would likely be needed, because it somehow be able to complete the story, yet it doesn't seem so in some way, since the way how you constructed the story fitted each other, fitting each other nicely as if like puzzles.

Description (7/10): The description is simple and enough. It didn't show much or give away the plot, but only gave a overall summarization, a lingering feeling and inclining of curiosity to what will happen.

On a hot day of summer, a lanky boy came. A day so hot, yet you could tell there would be rain. [A period is needed at the end]

On a hot day of summer, a certain lanky boy went away [Grammar and the verb used in the sentence.]

"Promise me one thing; don't you ever forget me." [You don't need to have a space between each sentence, to place the semi-colon.] 

Characters (12/15): The characters are okay, played them how you wanted to play. I reviewed them each and noticed that they don't have much of a background of themselves, a side of their own and probably a personality of their own. They have, I assure you, but I what I'm looking for is beyond their one to two handed personality. It would be nice to see their other sides and how things will develop from there on, but seeing that there is a certain structure or limit that you must possess or achieve, I assume that having that kind of personality will do for a one-shot. A bit tweak and twirl in each would do, to bring up the scenes alive, beause what are the scenes for if there are no characters living and acting in it?

Originality/Plot (16/20): I like the plot, I admit, but there are few reasons as to why I deducted points. The plot is nice and has a good flow, yet from what I have read, it doesn't have this strong or 'solid' plot. Yes, it's a plot, yet it doesn't have this 'feeling' (how should I say this?)-I mean, it doesn't seem to be that strong off. Yes, you developed the building relationship between Woohyun, Sungyeol and the others. Connected them each, little by little until they became inseparable, became Infinite. Truly heart-warming and I felt it, the lingering feeling. Then after building it up, few scenes then it started, the cough...coughs until Sungyeol went away to a nice place and in the end where the six of them hopes, inclined and cling to their hearts and memories and being as Infinite. Yes, you portrayed it that way, that summarization on how things end up that way slowly by slowly and it definitely did a great job, yet, a bit more twists and turns of the plot would do, to interlock with it and form a beautiful map of the story.

Flow (18/20): The flow is really nice. Really. It has a nice pacing and it is really maintained. The constrcution and the scenes were delivered out, important ones and that seemingly fit one another. They lock in and out of each other and I'm impressed to see how things flowed out smoothly, showing how things went by without telling. A simple and wishful flow.

Spelling (11/15): Knowing well that English is not your first language, I wouldn't judge you for that. I understand that, since mine isn't also and it takes time to adjust to all of it to have at least a very decent and less error in English language. Let me just tell you what you should have a review about. 

*Punctuations [I noticed that in the first part of the story, you have a decent marking of punctuations, but when it came to half until the end, it turns out to be different it should be. Proofreading would be good to double check it all if you missed any.]

*Capitalization [First letter of the first sentence or dialogue should always be capitalize. There are also some rules in each capitalization of each part of the sentences and you might want to take a scan or have a read in the internet?]

*Tenses [Present, Past and Future tenses. These three are simple confusing to use, if you get what I mean. Each depends, but if you use past, stick to the past and don't linger around to the other two. A scan at verb tenses would be great]

Enjoyment (3/5): Despite all, I enjoyed the story, feeling the momentarily touches of slight romance and angst and lingering feeling of each character. A bit spice and touches of scenes would do, despite the maintained pace of the story. Adding a bit more wouldn't ruin it, but be sure to add some only, not to pour it all.

Total: (77/100)=77%

Extra Comment: First, I should sincerely apologize for the late review. Let me explain: I left AFF for some time to attend to personal reasons and I'm still not in the right standing, but I'm taking a break (for today). I already reread your story for about 5 times and had my assured review for each section. Setting that aside, I played in between strict and mild and I hope I didn't make you wait too long. I'm sorry once again and thank you for requesting.