Destiny??-kiki420

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/188825/destiny-m1xed-apply-fanfic-romance-bap-applyfanfic

Story title (3/5): I couldn’t say whether the title has connection with the story at all or its connection would appear later. I found some hints, but very weak in the reader’s eyes. The title isn’t eye-catching nor spot-on but I could say it had my interest on it. Regarding about your title, it’s really not necessary to have two question marks nor to have a question mark at the end of the title. It’s a bit bother, and the title could have been much better, seeing that the title is often used and that I haven’t seen its contribution yet to the story.

Appearance (8/10): The genres are spread out perfectly throughout the story and I have no problem with that. The poster looks nice and all, showing off more like a character chart due to the names. Blending and rightful colours are to be observed because it’s not highly maintained in the current poster, but that’s okay, though. The story is neat, no unnecessary placing of things in the story and so. Your writing style is simple; balancing the dialogue and narration, quite neat but could have been neater.

Description (7/10): The description is okay. It didn’t tell out the whole plot at all, instead it made me (the readers) wonder what’s the catch and all. Though I find it not alluring, nor does it intrigue me, the description could have been better than the present.

Characters (13/15): The characters are okay. You’ve developed them throughout the story very well, playing their roles and showing off their personality. Even though I don’t know their personal background that much, I could see that they have been well developed and played in the story which is by the way enough. The other minor characters like Jin and Sooyoung are definitely amusing and intriguing. Why? Because I find their scenes cute and adorable and it made me think that they are the main characters of the story which is not. The interaction between B.A.P and M1XED are cute, definitely adorable, yet amusing on the side note.

Originality/Plot (15/20): The plot isn’t really that rare or unique, but I do love the way how you developed the story and how it is constructed. You did a great job forming the group, knowing well who is going to have the roles and couples and turns plus twists of the story. Just develop the story more, adding twists and turns, too make up the cliché stuffs and to further excite us.

Flow (18/20): The flow is nice, shifting of scenes are okay and didn’t disturb the flow of the story. The pacing is okay and so are the interactions of characters with each other. Some parts are rushed a bit and some are right on the track. The sudden announcement of cruise got me questioning out of the blue, wondering how things end up going to the cruise and coincidentally the interaction of characters between each other is so casual as if they’ve known the others so well. I guess they had their ‘time’, if you know what I mean, but it really just bothered me a little.

Spelling (13/15): I found some minor mistakes, misspellings and punctuations. I suggest that you go read the chapters again and you’ll find the misspellings; it’s really not hard to find it.

Enjoyment (5/5): Totally enjoyed the story. The interactions and scenes definitely made me smile. Even though it’s still not yet done and more is to come, I’ll be cheering for the future chappies!

Total: 82/ 100= 82%

Extra Comment: Omg, I’m so sorry for the late review! I’m really sorry for being late. *bows* Hope you’ll forgive me. Um, I hope I didn’t disappoint you or so with the review. Thank you for requesting and I hope you’ll come back again.