365 Days; Keep Me Always-AnExoticShawol

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/448389/365-days-keep-me-always-infinite-missa-myungsoo-oneshot-suzy-myungzy

Title (10/10):  The title is simple yet a spot-on. Not eye-catching but it does perk one’s curiosity. The title did a great job contributing to the story and tying it whole together with the ending. You emphasized the ‘Keep me always’ in some parts of the plot and I noticed that it somehow its job and connection through the story and characters. A very nice and simple title that goes along together with the plot.

Design (9/10): I’ll just suggest that you might want to get a poster and background from a graphic shop. And aside from that, the genres, I believe you might want to put up psychological or AU? Because the plot proves it and angst plus romance doesn’t qualify the whole story. Regarding about your writing style, I noticed that you aren’t the type to use narrative. You only pointed out that is important and focuses more on dialogue than to fully expand the details of the surroundings. I’m not sure if I would suggest this but, it could be okay if you would put some more narration to match up with the dialogues, but yet again, your writing style is simple and is enough.

Mechanics [Spelling, Grammar, Structures] (13/15): The mechanics were fine. I just found some minor mistakes throughout. Just some comma and such and take note of 322 days before. The last sentence where Myungsoo is left bewilder. It should be bewilderment. And also the shreaked? It should be shrieked.  Others are fine. The construction of the mechanics throughout the story is well-built, to be honest. And your vocabulary is simple and nice.

Plot (19/20): About the plot, I must say you really did a great job with the twists and such. Playing the past before the present and shows how it ended up that way, I could really say you did an excellent job in making me confused. The plot is simple at first but it has this own uniqueness and mysteriousness that wraps around the whole story. Part Two really needs to be updated soon.

Characters (14/15): The characters are okay; they played their role very well throughout the story. You played their characters and personality very well, but really I couldn’t help but be bewildered about the other man’s (the one on the asylum) attitude as to why he is like that and such. But other than that, you did a great job.

Flow (9/10): The flow of the story is okay. I could understand the day skips, but somehow I couldn’t really understand how the story ends up in that way. How Suzy disappears like a wind all of a sudden. Hopefully, it would be answered in Part two. But other than that, the pacing of the scenes and story is on the right track plus the interaction of characters with each other. I guess, that’s it?

Overall Enjoyment (10/10): Despite that I’m somehow having trouble how the story ends up this way, I enjoyed the story greatly. Throughout the 365 days, I enjoyed each days.

Ending (10/10): I really shouldn’t be grading this, but for this side (Myungsoo’s), I think I needed to grade this section. The ending is simple, yet again, confusing how it ended up that way and how things turned out to be twisted and such. Yet again, I suspect that you’ll satisfy our bewilderment in the part two. But anyways, I liked how the ending restarts with what happened 365 days ago and how it ties with the title very well.

Overall: (96/100)= 96%

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