The Girl Who Wants Death-DespisedSecret-review pick up
The Girl Who Wants Death-DespisedSecret
Title (8/10): The title is a little bit long, but nonetheless, a spot-on. Eye catching and irks me (the readers) a lot. The heading ties the whole plot together and isn’t being left out; instead it’s the center of attention which is very pleasant to see.
The title also gave out the necessary feeling and vibe to the readers. And also the title contributes throughout the story. The title, though, could have been shortened, but in other way, I think the present title is okay. (I think too much of Paolo Coelho’s books, gosh)
Anyways, the title is really good and presents the story very well.
Design (9/10): The genres are played thoroughly throughout the story and none of it strayed away from the story which I’m very pleased. And also your current poster, I’m really loved it. The pictures, the background, the font of the title and the size, everything, it are really beautiful. The vibe of the poster expresses the genres really well. Also, the poster reflects of the whole story, making the poster fit in the story.
Mechanics [Spelling, Grammar, Structures] (14/15): Being too focused in the story is really a bad idea, because I really found nothing misplace, no error at all. Only when I read it twice, is that I found some tiny errors. Punctuations only, though, no problem at all; just pointed it out, some commas and semi-colon. The grammar is fine and so does the structure of the paragraph and others. The mechanics is almost flawless.
Plot (19/20): The plot is nice, creative and a hooker. The plot focuses on the main genres and not the minor ones. The minor genres which is romance, is slightly recognized throughout the story but the main are greatly played out throughout. The plot of suicidal, depression and light and friends, are a bit common but the way how you created the plot and how you constructed the play. I’m really impressed by it. The originality is a bit too common but as I have said the twists and how you constructed it, made up for it.
I personally like how you didn’t focus on too much in romance but gave that certain genre its importance and how it gave its contribution to the story very well like the main genres. The construction of one’s mind is very hard but so easy when the said person is thinking of it, and as you have mentioned in the story or more like in Sunhi’s POV, it’s addicting. The slip of depression and suicidal doesn’t miss out when there’s a trigger to it. I’m experiencing as of it now, the depression and suicidal, and I could somehow proudly say, I’m half of her personality. But setting that aside, I really like your plot and hwaiting for the sequel.
Characters (14/15): The characters are well played throughout the story. How the protagonist plays her role and how she thinks, the same with others. I find f(x)’s attitude toward the protagonist’s case is slightly a bit off, smiling and thinking her case is no problem at all-which I’m very pleased, because there are characters like that in reality. Kai’s contribution in the story is very important and I could say, you did a good job in playing his two roles, as a dancer and as Kai. I like how you portrayed Kai in different persons and Sunhi thinking it’s different for the first few times. Kai did a great job and left an impact on Sunhi, but they switched in the end, but hopefully I pray that Kai and Sunhi would get through with it.
Plus, the way how you played the characters in the story is as if they are in reality. Their personality matched their roles and where they stand and how they are played out, and I personally liked how you played Sunhi’s character.
Flow (9/10): The flow of the mechanics are fine, the same with the flow of interactions also. You did a great job in the interaction. A severe depressed person takes some time to open up, and how you played the character throughout the story, is really impressive. I find it impressive to see how the whole story turned out and the ending ends the whole musical together amazingly. There are some points where I find it somehow a bit fast, but aside from that the whole story is in a good pace.
Overall Enjoyment (9/10): I enjoyed the story very much. Considering by the fact how you played the story throughout and that you didn’t stray off from the topic. The interactions were great and the way of helping someone was also great. You did a very good job and I applause you for that ^^
Ending (10/10): The ending totally fitted the whole story; fitting every piece in the jigsaw puzzle. The ending…it’s like an earl grey tea. It’s slightly sweet yet it’s so bitter. The bitter taste conquering the sweet. The ending where Kai is dull and is confused of everything, broken-like and where Eun Mi feels the happiness and love from her friends but there is one corner in her heart that is dim-note of Jongin there.
The finale, in my opinion, is very creative and well-thought. Simple, yet has a deep impact. I liked the thought of how you ended the fic, from where it begun it also ends in the same way. It’s so rare to find a depressing story that ends with the beginning. So, I’m glad to find this story ^^
Overall: (92/100)= 92%
Extra Comments: I’m so sorry for the late review *bows* Thank you for requesting and hope you’ll come back again.
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