A Price to Pay-theloveinlife-pick up review
A Price to Pay-theloveinlife
Story title (4.5/5):
This title of yours is truly a spot-on for angst readers. Really. I don’t even know what I did, but the next thing I know that I was reading the final chapter. Seriously, this title is such a heart breaker. A totally spot-on, eye-catching and twist crazy creative title. I could see some title that could suit the story but yours definitely ties and contributes more in your story.
Appearance (7.5/10):
Let me deal with the genres first.
Genres: Your genres are angst, romance, dark romance and implied plus the category of psychological. You’ve portrayed them greatly in the story, never leaving anything behind. You’ve credited them with much deserve credit which I’m very pleased.
Moving on with the poster:
Hue: The hue of the poster is quite dark and somehow directs more on psychological and dark romance, which I’m okay with it, but the hue is a bit too common, don’t you think? It could be medium blue crossover with dark orange and splatter of red, but sensing that the hue somehow connects with the genres and title. It’s okay though, but I suggest that it to be bit lighter. Ah, yes, it does bring out the vibe of dark romance, heavy angst and psychological, but a new change of it, wouldn’t harm, don’t you think?
Pictures: The pictures were okay and could be better together with the hue, but other than that, the pictures were fine.
Background/Set-Up: The set-up or background of the poster is okay, but somehow it doesn’t tie well to the title it has set up. It could have been like…city lights or a car underneath the pictures of Kyuwook facing each other…and yeah…it could have been better.
Title: The font that was used for the title was beautiful and the size was in right amount. Nothing more to be said.
Collaboration of everything: The poster is okay, great and totally match up to the title and genres, but it could have been better. Not really this dark; it could have been simpler yet demonstrates or gives out the emotions that are needed to deliver out.
Your writing style is beautiful. Very descriptive and deep that credits the genres very well. You’ve displayed how their life goes and the emotions were greatly snaps our heart. Your style is really breathtakingly beautiful and very detailed.
Description (8.5/10):
The description was very alluring and only gave out what is needed to be told. Well, it did tell there is a character death, but setting that aside, you’ve done a great job in dealing with the description that only dealt out the important information that are needed to known by the readers, themselves.
Characters (15/15):
Let me break it down one by one:
Ryeowook: Ryeowook was bubbly, cheerful, lovely and-well you could say he is a great boyfriend to have and all. Loves Kyuhyun very much and will do anything to be with him, but when Kyuhyun told him that he doesn’t want him anymore, he was likely-thrown into the pits of the abyss-broken like a glass that could never be returned. He was-forced-married to Yesung and most likely after a few months or maybe year/s, when Yesung gave back his freedom, life seems to come back to him in his miserable and frail look and state. He died when he almost got to hear Kyuhyun’s confession to him. He really got to pay the price for others, huh?
Kyuhyun: Kyuhyun was most likely the victim of all the sickening twist that circled around his life. He never wanted it to happen, yet it happened because of love. He didn’t want to lose Ryeowook, but he needs to, because he has nothing to offer to Ryeowook in return and he didn’t even bother hearing what Ryeowook has to say about it. /Sigh/ Kyuhyun, you idiotic brat.
Yesung: Yesung…is a guy that started it all. Well, you could say he was the one who destroyed everything. He, making Kyuhyun’s company go bankrupt and him claiming a broken Ryeowook in return, when he knows it’s his fault for making him like this. He didn’t repent, yet he was pitiful for everything he had done, because for all the cause he had done, he was the one who reaped it greatly. You could say, he was slightly the victim, but he’s not.
Sungmin: Sungmin was lonely, devastated, a mere puppet and overall; insane. Yeah, he was sickly twisted in his mind to the core. He was pitiful for the past he had and how Kyuhyun drove him into like this, but my mind changed when I saw how sickly twisted his mind was because of his yearning of love for Kyuhyun and how broken he was.
Overall: You did a great job in developing their personalities and roles in the story. You’ve told their past/background of who they were and how they turned into the present person they are now. You’ve done a great job in playing their roles and how you played their emotions and how they felt.
(My poor Wookie ;A;)
Originality/Plot (19.5/20):
The plot is truly breathtakingly beautiful and bittersweet crazy. As soon as I saw the title, I knew my heart wouldn’t take it, and I was soooo freakin’ right about it. My cake…ugh. The plot was exotic and truly beautiful. Emotions and Impressions were delivered out very well and you did a great job in creating the of the story and especially the end….ugh.
The originality of this story is understandable. Even though it’s typical to have your unrequited love and killing to have that person you yearn, yours was truly exquisite! The plot was creatively created and well-planned. Even though it has a similar feeling and similarities with the idea of others, nonetheless this story is really beautiful. The tension and dark romance and how psychological and heavy angst took its role very well.
Everything worked out well.
Flow (19/20):
The flow was fine; it was a beat on the right tempo and rhythm. You’ve explained the things that were needed to explain and displayed the scenes very well and how things turned out in the end. The flow of character development was okay and there weren’t any disruptions in the flow of emotions that you portrayed from the beginning until the end which I’m very pleased to see.
Spelling (14/15):
There weren’t really major errors in your story, but minors only, though; some punctuation like comma and semi colon, like that. It’s really not visible, but I just couldn’t help but point it out to you. The grammar was fine and the words were easy to digest in. The structure of your sentences and words were fine.
Enjoyment (5/5):
Before I say anything else…I hate you. I really hate you so much. On the contrary of what I said, how could you do this to me? Make my heart shatter into broken fragments? How and why? Why must you make my dear Wookie dead, mangled because of his frail state? Why? I dare you to answer me ;A; My freakin’ cake dropped on the floor while reading your story! WHY?!
So by reading what I said above…you probably know that I didn’t really hate you, right? Yeah, yeah, just pay for the slice of chocolate cake ;A;
Total: 93 out of 100= 93%
Extra Comment:
Harr~ Hello~ Cherry here~ Sorry for the late review! I hope the review have fulfilled your expectation. If not, I’m sorry. Thank you for requesting and hope you’ll come back again!
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