Woods worth Academy- Anailys & KatingaTrouble-Pick-up
Woods worth Academy- Anailys & KatingaTrouble
Title (9/10): The title is fine. Completely fine. The problem though is that it’s not very eye-catching and gives the false impression of the plot. It doesn’t give the right impression to the readers. It would be okay if it is a twist title but the title is not. Way too far from it. Maybe not that far, but far. But even though it’s not eye-catching, it gives the readers the curiosity. Yes. Curiosity. A very good one. Because the title doesn’t depend all in the ‘eye-catching’-ness but it is likely to perk up the curiosity and interest of the readers. And that’s what your title have greatly done. I’m happy to see the title has a great contribution to the plot. It was so fine and well-done.
Design (9/10): The poster is fine and great. It showed who the characters are, but lacked one of the main points of design.
- Pictures [Check]
- Title [Nope. None]
- Hue/Colour [Check]
- Blending of Background, Hue and Pictures [Check. It’s fine.]
I just took a point 5 off because of that and when I take more in of the story, I sensed the vibe is getting stronger and stronger. I suggest that you request a poster to match with the vibe that is surrounding the chapters, but nevertheless, your style of writing is very impressive. I loved how you very descriptive over things in each of their perspective. Your descriptive style is high and very much well-known and well-enhanced. I liked your writing style and somehow it soothes me that it completely contributes to the story very well and not to ruin it with too much descriptiveness, because you know how to balance it.
Mechanics [Spelling, Grammar, Structures] (13/15): The grammar and structure are perfectly fine. I didn’t find any hassle while reading. But the spelling is one of my concern though. But don’t worry I didn’t find a lot of it. Just few. And when I meant few. One or two or three of it. I found a misspelling on Chapter 5 on the last paragraph. It should be ‘caught’ not ‘cought’. And others that isn’t much bothered to be about. I just find the ‘cought’ a bit…distracting. Yeah, just to let you know.
Plot (20/20): The plot isn’t the typical story you see out there. (Seriously no pun intended). What I’m saying is that your plot is unique. Your plot has a lot of mystery and questions to be answered and a lot of chapters too come up with, as you may know. But what I’m really trying to say is that I have never seen anything like this. Really. It’s really breath-taking how you create the story with so much depth and feelings. The plot has a lot of missing puzzles that my brain is working over-time. A completely magnificent story.
Characters (15/15): The characters were….great. Completely great. Even though you didn’t say their personality and attitudes on the foreword or so, it’s great to see that you showed it through chapters together with the scenes. You changed their personality and attitudes which I’m glad and quite pleased. Some doesn’t change who they are and others changed them but completely worn the characters off for they cannot control their out-off character even though they were the ones who changed it. But I’m glad you’re sticking to your characters very well and that you show the depth of their soul and that their own personality isn’t to be taken lightly.
Their own lives are so different that other judgemental person takes granted and jumps into conclusion because of the attitude and the surface they’re showing. But in time, they are really not the person who they are.
P.S. I like Woohyun, Baro and Sungyeol characters. Seriously, I like them Sungjong is still new and mostly couldn’t decipher what he should be feeling.
P.S.S I really like to tell more about the characters but I’m going to keep it for myself. Oh and curse Ye Jin for being so damn overprotective over Sungyeol. Damnit, Sungyeol is not your freakin’ son and he’s not someone you could control and treat like a child you wanted to. He’s a grown up too, you know. And also Jaejoong, ugh….please both of you. I’m really wanting to call the twins to snap both of your heads for being such a naïve and idiotic brats.
P.S.S.S Went overboard. Ehem. Sorry.
Flow (9/10): The flow is perfect. Even though it might be slow for others, but the story’s pacing is perfectly fine. There are scenes so it’s okay and you wanted the readers know who they are and what their history is and what they have became now. Just don’t drag it too far. Because if you take it slowly like taking their characters by chapters, the pace would be bad and would less attract readers.
I would also catch you changing form first person POV to 3rd person. In chapter 1 there is. You might want to change that or put a note that it is you who is saying that.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10): I really liked and enjoyed the story. The concept, characters and the depth of the story. Somehow I find it really comfortable to read these kind of stories that someone (like me) could relate so easily in reality. The story grew on me. Literally. I loved how you constructed their lives as if it were real.
Ending (/10): I won’t be grading this section ‘cuz the story is not yet done :)
Extra Comment [Summary of Story and Answer to the Author’s Question]:
You don’t have to worry about your story. Your story is great and really captivating for the story. Your descriptive writing is already good and don’t change that. Because adding more descriptiveness gets a bit overboard and isn’t pleasant, I tell you. It’s already great to have your moderate descriptiveness and it perfectly fits for the story. I just wanted to suggest to you about the rotation. Don’t further in with telling the characters for each chapters. Take a chill and create a scene not only focusing on the character and his background then scenes. It’s a bit dragging the plot too long. You may change from time to time. But it’s okay if you don’t do this, seriously. It’s only my opinion and the decision is still yours. Just take your time, is what I want to say.
Overall: (86/90)= 96%
Extra Comments: Hallo~ Cherry here. Great to see you :) I really loved your story and I have subscribed. I hope you are satisfied with the review and keep up the good work! I’ll be cheering for you guys. Yes, guys. This review is for you and the co-author since you two have been doing a great job in the story. Thank you for requesting and hope you’ll come back again!
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