3:03-insertnamehere1

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/334489/3-03-romance-exo-kai-domestic-kyungsoo-kaisoo

Title: 15-15 points

-Uh, huh. You deserve full points. Why not? You have such a great title! It truly sparked my interest and curiosity. It kept me hooked up and wondered what is 3:03? Is it morning or afternoon? It truly gave me questions that I have to click on the title and boom. Goes to the plot and yeah.

-It gave out the simple vibe of curiosity. No genre at all. It feels like neutral. It’s simple and neat No need for words or more. Just a simple title with that, is already a bang of eye-catching and captivating the reader’s heart and eyes.

Description & Foreword: 9-10 points

-Let me tell you that your description is really simple and neat.

-It truly sparks my curiosity to what is going to happen in the plot. It asks me, what is going to happen at 3:03 am? So yep, truly nice and clean.

Plot: 20-25 points from two categories

• Originality: 13-15 points

-The story has its own originality indeed! But, the problem is, the repetition of the same idea is cliché. It may be different, but, the idea is the same. So close to the originality, because it is rare to see such a story with a brief explanation of what is happening in 3:03 am.

• Believability: 7-10 points

-Somehow, it’s not believable enough. It may be, but, it isn’t believable enough. The genre is there, but it is really a bit confusing. Try putting some details. It only lacked the details.

Presentation: 8-10 points

-The presentation is simple and nice. You delivered out the emotion very well. It’s just that, it didn’t give out such an impression to me in the first and second. Try giving out some sparks in the first then, yeah. Kaisoo.  

Characters: 11-15 points

-The characters are simple, yet, weren’t told of what their background and description is. I’m confused of who they are and what they are. Their status changes from time to time. Try putting some details and it’ll be good. Just don’t put too much information , just some.  

Spelling & Grammar: 8-10 points

-I just found some mistakes, just some though.

*Spelling [None]

*Punctuations [Some}

*Tense [1 to 2 errors]

*Adverbs and Adjectives [None]

*Grammar [None}

*Syntax [None]

*Forms [None]

*Choice of Words {Great}

-Comma and Semi-colon are my problem. I found some parts where you should put a comma and a semi-colon.

#Comma-used for indicating pauses

#Semi-colon-used to connect two clauses together.

Writing Style: 9-10 points

-Your writing is simple, yet, beautiful. It’s not too descriptive, yet, informal. It has the right amount of descriptive and simplicity. Your writing style isn’t much seen in some other author’s writing style. It’s great to see you have a writing style that is easy to understand. :)

Flow: 7-10 points

-Hmm, it’s a bit rushed, and, some parts are confusing for me. It gives me the pondering moment. The flow is somehow mixed up? Some parts though. I can’t get a grasp on what is happening. Just fix the some parts and it’ll be good or add some new scenes and give out some details.

Enjoyment: 15-15 points

-Truly enjoyed this story. It may be short, but, all the fluffiness is there! Gosh, I’ve read it 6 times already! And I can’t hold enough of it! I just want to say something, though.

-Please make more.                                                                       

Bonus: 5-5 points

-Hmm, let’s see why I gave you a full point bonus.

1. Because of the overload fluff
2. You have a great sense of writing
3. You are a great author
4. You make me look like an idiot in front of the crowd.
5. You made me embarrassed in front of my brother’s fiancée’s parents and his fiancée.

-Now…I want to thank you for the 4 and 5.

Total Score: 107/125=86%

Extra: Hello! Cherry here! Hope my review is okay and is satisfactory. Thank you so much for requesting and hope you’ll come back again!