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- infinitely-yours
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Reviewer: kiki420
Title: 3/5
The title slightly reveals what the story might be about. Clearly its going to be about a guy named Jung Daehyun and something is going to frustrate the main character.
Description and Foreward: 6/10
I think the description is good, but I think you don't need to reveal so much about the story. For instance, you don't need to reveal that Kim Namjoo is going to have her first love and first hearbreak. But the 'bucket of laughter' may be included since that's a very vague description. I also liked how you didn't describe the character's personality and leave it to the readers for them to anticipate their surprises when reading the story.
Poster: 5/5
The poster is fantastic, there isn't anything to improve in that part of the story. Meaning the appearance.
Chapter Tiltes: 4/5
I like the chapter titles because it doesn't reveal what's going to happen in the story, instead the reader can read and find out his or herself.
You stopped using 'Chapter _' after Chapter 11, you should stay with one thing instead of changing it.
Plot: 15/20
I like the plot but it lacks some originality. The original thing about the story is mainly Namjoo's personality. She isn't the perfect smart girl that everyone's main character is for their story. She's a normal girl with flaws just like everyone else. And also I liked how you included the fact that fame can get into idols' heads. Idols aren't perfect, they have their good and bad moods as well.
Flow: 10/10
I had no problems whatsoever reading the chapters, there was no confusion as well. In fact, I love how you thought of things that will make the reader laugh.
Characters: 13/15
I like how you portrayed the character's personality. But I think you changed Daehyun's personality way too fast. Meaning one chapter he was still cold and the next he started calling Namjoo yeobo already. There should be a process of his personality change. It doesn't happen immediately.
Font: 3/5
The font was great, I was able to read everything perfectly fine. The only thing that can be improved is the 'Pov' part of the story. Whoever's Pov and the actual chapter are in the same font so it takes some reading in order for me to realized that it's a different person's point of view.
I deducted another point because you should keep the same font for the whole entire story. It gets annoying when you're used to this specific font and the author just changes it.
Grammar: 13/15
You did great in grammar, but I was still able to catch some tiny mistakes. They aren't big mistakes but it's still good if you correct them. You also seem to have to habit of forgeting to add a period at the end of a sentence.
1: "Kim Namjoo, I might not know you that well, but you're going to die. Painfully."
2. "YAH! HOW TO DO YOU CLOSE THIS WINDOW?!"
3. I'm really sorry."
These three mistakes are from the first 9 chapters..
Since I only point out 3 mistakes, the rest are for yourself to find and correct.
Mistake chapters: 10, 13, 14, 19, 20, 23, 25.
Enjoyment: 9/10
I loved it! The story made me laugh and it wasn't hard to understand. I'm glad you chose me to do your review.
Total: 81/100
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- infinitely-yours
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- kiki420
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- kiki420
Hope you like your trailer! :)
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- dancingintherain
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Just Friends
Reviewer: kiki420
Title: 5/5
It's not a specific title that would give away anything that might be part of the story. The title describes the story generally, not specific at all.
Description and Foreward: 6/10
The description and the foreward reveal too much of the actual story making it feel like a typical love triangle story. The casts personality and relationships are also revealed, not having a anticipating feeling of how the characters are going to be portrayed.
Poster: 4/5
Something seems to be off about the poster. It seems like there's something that can be improved.
Chapter Titles: 4/5
The chapter titles reveal too much of the actual chapter. If there's a way to make the chapter to seem more mysterious, the title should be changed.
Plot: 17/20
It lacks creativity. Like most dramas and stories, it's a love triangle. Two people are dating and someone likes one of them, blah blah blah. It's always the same thing over and over again.
Flow: 8/10
It gets confusing at time, especially when the 'Pov', point of view changes. There's no indication of when/who it changes to, letting the reader inference on his/her own. As a result, it gets extremely confusing.
Characters: 13/15
The characters were portrayed really well.
Font: 3/5
You might want to try some kind of font, small font for the song at the end since it's making your chapters seem extremely long. Some kind of font may also help make your story seem more organized. For example, the song and the actual chapter can be in two different fonts to tell them apart. In some chapters, the font got huge and I had some difficulty adjusting my eyes to the font.
Grammar: 11/15
In all honestly, in the beginning of the story, the grammar is just terrible. The grammar mistakes start to decrease as the chapters of the story start increasing. I've noticed that it seems like a habit, author, you always forget to end/start the quotation marks. You would put one in the beginning or end of a quote and forget about the other one. Another habit is that author, you use he and she with the wrong person. Using she with Donghae and he was Dara.
Something else in that, in the story, author, you shouldn't use 'btw' or 'wth', just write out the entire phrase since in reality people don't actual say the letter 'btw', we say 'by the way.'
Enjoyment: 9/10
Even though the grammar in the beginning drove me crazy, the story got better as it went to its . It made me laugh out loud, smile a lot. Overall I enjoyed the story.
Total: 80/100
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What?!
Reviewer: kiki420
Title: 4/5
The title grabs your attention but it lacks some creativity. The title 'WHAT?!' may lead readers to wonder what the story/one-shot may be about but there's many stories out there with a similar title.
Description and Foreward: 9/10
I love the description and the foreward. They don't give out a lot of information about the actual story.
Poster: 5/5
I love the poster! It gives the mysterious feeling for what the story is going to be about.
Chapter Tiltes: 4/5
I like the title since there's only one. 'The Sweetest Jerk Around', it's not that creative which I deducted points for but, it doesn't reveal much about the actual chapter.
Plot: 17/20
I like the plot! BUT, as always again there's a slight lack of creativity. The love triangle is something that nearly every story I've read here has. Even though I have it in my own story as well, I'm trying to be creative about how the three way triangle is. You should try to do the same.
Flow: 7/10
The chapter got kind of confusing towards the end since when the talking happened, nearly none of the talking was labeled, so I didn't know who was saying what which is extremely confusing. The beginning of the story was great though!
Characters: 13/15
I like how the character's are portrayed since it's extremely clear. But the personality of the 2NE1 members, Big Bang and Suzy aren't really clear. You should have made the chapter bit longer so it's clearer to the reader. Also, there's no need to skip a line every time because it seriously takes up space which you could have used to portray the character better and the ending could have been better as well.
Font: 2/5
I absolutely hate the color of the font, I had extreme difficultly trying to read the oneshot. The font however is good, just the color is off.
Grammar: 12/15
The grammar was good overall, but I still found some spelling and punctuation mistakes every here and there.
Enjoyment: 7/10
I enjoyed the beginning of the story but the end was too confusing for me to enjoy.
Total: 80/100
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I hope you like the poster~ Sorry if it's too simple! ^^" I don't know what is happening to me. Anyways, it's my first time making a gif poster for a customer! So yeah... Don't forget to credit or I'll delete this poster!! XD Anyways (again)... ENJOY~~!!
- infinitely-yours
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- kiki420
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Be With Me Tonight
Reviewer: kiki420
Title: 5/5
I actually really like the title, it's sweet but shows a little of what the story is about.
Description and Foreward: 9/10
I love the description of the story, it grabs the readers attention. In the foreward, it's the same as well because it shows a little bit of the actual story. The part that makes the reader want to read it.
Poster: 4/5
I like the poster overall but I feel like with the description and the foreward, the poster should have darker for the colors.
Chapter Tiltes: 4/5
The chapter titles sometimes reveal too much about the story. Even without reading it, I would already know what it's about.
Plot: 17/20
Honestly, I loved the plot! There are some parts that can be improved on though. Some parts of the story are predictable. Like the reader knows it's going to happen. Maybe twist it a little so what happens isn't what was predicted.
Flow: 10/10
The flow was great, nothing was confusing and everything was explained thoroughly.
Characters: 13/15
All the characters were portrayed perfectly. I was able to tell what kind of personality they had, what they would do and such. Nothing was confusing me about the characters.
Font: 5/5
I like the font, it's easy to read and it's not too big nor too small.
I also like how you separated the writing from the actual story, that way it's easy to tell the two apart.
Grammar: 13/15
There are slight grammar mistakes here and there but because of the good story/chapter, I don't notice until I read the chapter for the second time.
Enjoyment: 9/10
I enjoyed the story! I didn't even know it was until I read the first chapter, but it was really good and I'm looking forward to you sequal.
Total: 89/100
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- infintely-yours
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Slave: Betrayal
Review: kiki420
Title: 5/5
I like the title. It matches the story and doesn't reveal a lot about the story.
Description and Foreward: 8/10
I like the description and the foreward. It doesn't reveal much about the story and the description can easily grab the reader's attention. The only thing I dislike about this feature of the story, is the foreward. Try to find a way to shorten this part of the story since I think it's too long. Maybe finding a way to shorten the credits to the revews. Or make the credits given to the posters shortened.
Poster: 5/5
I love the poster. Honestly, this is one of the best ones I've seen that isn't the happy/cute since those I've seen ones that blow your mind away. The dark theme matched with the title and it didn't seen out of place. An aspect in which I love.
The ones that come in later on in the story are also great posters. Since all of them match, having to do with the same them and not extremely diverse.
Chapter Tiltes: 4/5
The chapter title slightly reveals what the chapter is about. At least it's not those ten word long chapter title that tell you everything single little thing about the chapter. I think there's room for improvement for the chapter titles.
Plot: 17/20
I think the plot is great, relatively unique and creative. The only negative side about the story is the fact that Jessica is way too perfect. Eunhyuk has the personality that in reality some people actually have. On the other hand, you won't find someone like Jessica. Otherwise, the story isn't cliche and creative. Something that many stories doesn't have since most stories are so goddamn cliche.
Flow: 9/10
The flow of the story is great! It isn't confusing and I don't have to read the story over again just to be able to comprehend the story. I only need to read a chapter once to understand it completely. Occasionally, there would be a mistake that might make me think twice, but nothing more.
Characters: 11/15
The personality of Eunhyuk may be confusing at time, but the reader can clearly tell he's the type who has a soft side to them. However, Jessica is too perfect in this story. She doesn't have a single flaw making her inhumane. She's the typical character in the story who everyone falls in love with even though there are tons of other people as well.
Font: 3/5
Maybe the author can change the font into something else instead of the regular one. Arial, I think that's the name. It may be boring for the reader to see such plain text, but at least it's not something that would hurt the readers' eyes.
At the 15th chapter, I noticed the author changed the font. I think the size should be bigger, like a twelve or fourteen so it's easy for the readers to read.
Grammar: 13/15
I barely found any grammar mistakes which is great! There's barely been in stories which I've rarely found mistakes. Though, instead of pressing enter when someone wants to say something, you can put it into a couple. That way, the story wouldn't look so spaced apart.
Enjoyment: 9/10
Personally, I actually love reading . The in this story is absolutely fantastic.
The only thing I disliked since my mind was would crazy, whenever I saw a grammar mistake. That distracted me from the story causing me to not enjoy the story as much as I would have.
Total: 84/100
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You are my pedo and mine only
Reviewer: kiki420
Title: 3/5
Through the title, the reader can already tell what this story is about, without a single doubt. It's the type of story that cliche, the ones that the girlfriend doesn't want to share their boyfriends, which is normal since what girl would share their boyfriend.
Description and Foreward: 6/10
I originally was going to give you a 7, but the phrases to describe Minwoo revealed too much about the actual story. Like why reveal who falls in love with the girl at first sight, the author could have put Boyfriend together and wrote something about it, then the reader wouldn't know who's the male lead, it makes the story more mysterious.
Also, the pictures were too big and took much too much space. Maybe make the picture smalll, so there's more room for other necessary things.
Poster: 3/5
The poster could have been better, but points given for using it since honestly, it's not a very good poster. The editing and the words are just off.
Chapter Tiltes: 4/5
Good title, doesn't reveal too much about the actual story.
Plot: 14/20
The story went back too fast. I understand that it's an one-shot. The plot for this story would have been better if it's an actual fanfic instead of a short one-short.
It's slightly cliche, the love at first sight love. On the other hand, it's not because no one would have thought up a creeper stalking a worker in a candy shop by using the toliet every hour. This is one seriously creative part.
Flow: 7/10
The story went past WAY TOO FAST, excuse the caps, but seriously too fast. One day, Young Mi and Minwoo didn't even know each other. Literally, the next day, Minwoo confesses to her. Mined.
Characters: 12/15
I know what Minwoo and Sulli's personality are like. However, I have no clue about Young Mi's personality. The story just didn't last long enough for me to comprehend everything.
Font: 3/5
The author should choose to use a different font instead of the default one. Personally, I think the default font is extremely boring. The other ones provided are easier to read depending on the font size.
Grammar: 9/15
This story is seriously making me go crazy because of all the grammar mistakes. Firstly, the author should have used quotes when a character is saying something in the story. Also the story isn't a play or a drama. The format of the chapters act like it is when it's a script.
Instead of using the dashes, the author could have just states like for example;
Me: -shook my head- Aniya.. -turn over to everyone- I bought cookies for you guys~!
"Aniya." Minwoo said shaking his head. He turn proceeded into turning, facing everyone. "I bought cookies for you guys!" He loudly announced.
See how much better it is? Yes, no?
Enjoyment: 6/10
The story went too fast for me. It was hard to enjoy.
The author should have written this as an actual fanfic.
Total: 67/100
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SWEET MURDERER
Reviewer: kiki420
Title: 4/5
It's attention grabbing, making the reader want to read the story. However, you shouldn't use all caps for the title because occasionally, it may be difficult to decipher.
Description and Foreward: 8/10
I loved the description! The only flaw was the part where the author revealed what movie is the story based on. I never watched The Lovely Bones, but I've read the book. One was read or watched the movie would already have an idea of what the story is about and then they might lose their interest in your story.
Poster: 4/5
The poster could have been darker to represent horror anticipation, but I like it. Also if the poster was darker, it would have been much more mysterious to the reader. Not the best I've seen nor the worst.
Chapter Tiltes: /5
N/A
Plot: 17/20
Since it's not entirely the most creative plot and it's based on a movie, I deducted some points. However, it's still a good one-shot overall. And yes, a sequel is needed.
Flow: 8/10
The flow of the story was really good. Just the grammar mistakes confused me slightly occasionally throughout the story.
Characters: 12/15
The readers have no idea what the personality of Mandy is. Daehyun's personality is clear. The author should have spent some time, maybe a couple of minutes Mandy might have been with her sister or crush so the reader would have a better idea of her personality.
Font: 3/5
Change the font instead of using the default one. Personally, I found the default font boring and hard to read. There are much more interesting fonts that are available to use. Currently, this font is called Tahoma.
Grammar: 7/15
The grammar needs improvement. Sometimes the author uses the same pronoun 5 or 6 times, one sentence after the other. Change it around, use something else instead of 'I' or 'She' over and over again.
Somtimes the ending of the term the author uses is incorrect. For example;
She loves to get drunken and smoking and hangout in the clubs every night.
She loves to get drunk, smoke and hangout in the clubs on a daily basis.
"There was nothing unusual happened since Sir Daehyun moved into our area." This sentence is irking my feels.
Nothing unusual happened since Sir Daehyun moved into our area.
Instead of using words like *GASP*, the author should have said; I gasped loudly.
Enjoyment: 8/10
Even though there were many grammar mistakes, the story got really good towards the end. I ended up not noticing many of them until I read it for the second time.
Total: 71/95
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