Just Friends : Review

 

Title: 5/5

It's not a specific title that would give away anything that might be part of the story. The title describes the story generally, not specific at all. 

 

Description and Foreward: 6/10

The description and the foreward reveal too much of the actual story making it feel like a typical love triangle story. The casts personality and relationships are also revealed, not having a anticipating feeling of how the characters are going to be portrayed.

 

Poster: 4/5

Something seems to be off about the poster. It seems like there's something that can be improved.

 

Chapter Titles: 4/5

The chapter titles reveal too much of the actual chapter. If there's a way to make the chapter to seem more mysterious, the title should be changed.

 

Plot: 17/20

It lacks creativity. Like most dramas and stories, it's a love triangle. Two people are dating and someone likes one of them, blah blah blah. It's always the same thing over and over again. 

 

Flow: 8/10

It gets confusing at time, especially when the 'Pov', point of view changes. There's no indication of when/who it changes to, letting the reader inference on his/her own. As a result, it gets extremely confusing. 

 

Characters: 13/15

The characters were portrayed really well. 

 

Font: 3/5

You might want to try some kind of font, small font for the song at the end since it's making your chapters seem extremely long. Some kind of font may also help make your story seem more organized. For example, the song and the actual chapter can be in two different fonts to tell them apart. In some chapters, the font got huge and I had some difficulty adjusting my eyes to the font. 

 

Grammar: 11/15

In all honestly, in the beginning of the story, the grammar is just terrible. The grammar mistakes start to decrease as the chapters of the story start increasing. I've noticed that it seems like a habit, author, you always forget to end/start the quotation marks. You would put one in the beginning or end of a quote and forget about the other one. Another habit is that author, you use he and she with the wrong person. Using she with Donghae and he was Dara. 
Something else in that, in the story, author, you shouldn't use 'btw' or 'wth', just write out the entire phrase since in reality people don't actual say the letter 'btw', we say 'by the way.' 

 

Enjoyment: 9/10

Even though the grammar in the beginning drove me crazy, the story got better as it went to its . It made me laugh out loud, smile a lot. Overall I enjoyed the story. 

 

Total: 80/100

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