SWEET MURDERER : Review 

 

Title: 4/5

It's attention grabbing, making the reader want to read the story. However, you shouldn't use all caps for the title because occasionally, it may be difficult to decipher.

 

Description and Foreward: 8/10

I loved the description! The only flaw was the part where the author revealed what movie is the story based on. I never watched The Lovely Bones, but I've read the book. One was read or watched the movie would already have an idea of what the story is about and then they might lose their interest in your story.

 

Poster: 4/5

The poster could have been darker to represent horror anticipation, but I like it. Also if the poster was darker, it would have been much more mysterious to the reader. Not the best I've seen nor the worst. 

 

Chapter Tiltes: /5

N/A

 

Plot: 17/20

Since it's not entirely the most creative plot and it's based on a movie, I deducted some points. However, it's still a good one-shot overall. And yes, a sequel is needed.

 

Flow: 8/10

The flow of the story was really good. Just the grammar mistakes confused me slightly occasionally throughout the story.

 

Characters: 12/15

The readers have no idea what the personality of Mandy is. Daehyun's personality is clear. The author should have spent some time, maybe a couple of minutes Mandy might have been with her sister or crush so the reader would have a better idea of her personality. 

 

Font: 3/5

Change the font instead of using the default one. Personally, I found the default font boring and hard to read. There are much more interesting fonts that are available to use. Currently, this font is called Tahoma. 

 

Grammar: 7/15

The grammar needs improvement. Sometimes the author uses the same pronoun 5 or 6 times, one sentence after the other. Change it around, use something else instead of 'I' or 'She' over and over again. 
Somtimes the ending of the term the author uses is incorrect. For example;
She loves to get drunken and smoking and hangout in the clubs every night.
She loves to get drunk, smoke and hangout in the clubs on a daily basis.
"There was nothing unusual happened since Sir Daehyun moved into our area." This sentence is irking my feels. 
Nothing unusual happened since Sir Daehyun moved into our area.
Instead of using words like *GASP*, the author should have said; I gasped loudly.

 

Enjoyment: 8/10

Even though there were many grammar mistakes, the story got really good towards the end. I ended up not noticing many of them until I read it for the second time.

 

Total: 71/95

Little Warrior's Shop