Beach Tags by -goodbyehello

I'm afraid I don't have much to say about your story, for it's so short. Overall I think you have managed to create a good mood and I get the feeling this story is more like a stream of consciousness. The contrast between the warm memory and cold reality is very striking. I like it how the colorful beach tags add feeling to the story. 

The memory and reality mix together beautifully, but for me it was a bit hard to concentrate on reading this piece exactly because the reality and memory kept switching all the time. I think this could be fixed by simply breaking the paragraphs into smaller entities, to give more air and lightness to the story. Right now, it feels extremely heavy. 

Using capital letters would make it easier to read.

It was a bit hard to get into the flow of the text so perhaps shortening some sentences or breaking them in two would make difference.