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Kiss of the Hummingbird
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★Review from Mental Breakdown Reviews;
I hate (not really) cancer stories because they will always make me cry, and you've successfully done that. [...] Anyways, I enjoyed reading the story and I love the fact that it was also Hunhan. Really good job, loved it so much I gave it an upvote.
This story was reviewed by headinthebooks101 @ Mental Breakdown Reviews. I got an A: 85.5%! I must thank my high school English teacher and also I owe her an apology for always not doing my homework hahaha /ahem do your homework, kids/. You can find the full review here.
★Review from Suits and Gowns Review Ball;
Categories reviewed:
1) Plot
2) Grammar/spelling and writing style
- Plot
In the description, honestly I felt like you were just telling the plot and not really give a description. Your description is perfectly fine, just that when I read it, I understood the plot right away and that means, the story becomes really predictable and the readers already know whats coming. Sehun, an 18 year old who has stage IV lung cancer, totally gives up on life and wants everything to end but someone comes into his life, like a hummingbird. Basically from what I've been reading, my two endings are that, Sehun will lose his life and you give in a sad ending, Luhan secretly gives up his lungs (I'm not a doctor, so if that's not possible... OuO) or somehow, another donor or someone saves his life by a millisecond. Basically this is Sehun's point of view, his thoughts and feelings ect - I was slightly confused for a I don't know reason but maybe you did state in the foreword that it was Sehun's POV and I missed it, I think honestly 3rd POV would be better in this story (I'm kinda bad with POV's but I think 3rd POV is like he,she, their name, his name blah blah) because then you can see both sides but it works, doesn't have too much of a difference. For me, the plot seems really cliche, all author's "under" plot - basically the thing that everything builds around with is always (majority of them) are cliche and then they add plot twists, their writing style might turn it into
In the description, honestly I felt like you were just telling the plot and not really give a description. Your description is perfectly fine, just that when I read it, I understood the plot right away and that means, the story becomes really predictable and the readers already know whats coming. Sehun, an 18 year old who has stage IV lung cancer, totally gives up on life and wants everything to end but someone comes into his life, like a hummingbird. Basically from what I've been reading, my two endings are that, Sehun will lose his life and you give in a sad ending, Luhan secretly gives up his lungs (I'm not a doctor, so if that's not possible... OuO) or somehow, another donor or someone saves his life by a millisecond. Basically this is Sehun's point of view, his thoughts and feelings ect - I was slightly confused for a I don't know reason but maybe you did state in the foreword that it was Sehun's POV and I missed it, I think honestly 3rd POV would be better in this story (I'm kinda bad with POV's but I think 3rd POV is like he,she, their name, his name blah blah) because then you can see both sides but it works, doesn't have too much of a difference. For me, the plot seems really cliche, all author's "under" plot - basically the thing that everything builds around with is always (majority of them) are cliche and then they add plot twists, their writing style might turn it into
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