She is a Machine, but I Love Her

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Description

Kris, Luhan and Jongin all three know that something has gone very wrong when you feel like every day with the one you love above all else is a struggle. All three have a girlfriend who lost someone in the Tsunami in Thailand, 26th of December 2004. A very traumatic experience that has led to depression for all three of the poor girls. The question is; how do you fix someone who refuses to let you help them? How can you stay in love with someone who doesn't give you anything back?

 

Kris and Heather

It felt like it was yesterday that the catastrophe had occurred and changed the life of thousands of people, including myself. I would never forget the phone call from her mother, telling me something terrible had happened. At first, I thought the worst; thinking something might’ve happened to her. But it turned out she was okay, or ‘okay’. The day I picked her up at the airport, I could see that my girl would never be the same ever again.

 

Jongin and Mi Na

Her eyes were so blank that day, filled with sorrow and guilt. From that day onward, I spent each day telling her again and again that nothing of what had happened was her fault. Each day felt more tiresome than the previous. At day, the blank eyes were always staring blankly into the wall. At night she had nightmares, she woke up screaming and crying. I did my everything to calm her down. But nothing ever worked, she wasn’t getting better.

 

Luhan and Ai Li

When you love someone so much that just thinking about them hurts, it’s really serious. But when the person you love change and become someone you don’t know anymore, can you love them with  the same amount then? What do you do when you suddenly cannot remember the girl you once fell in love with? What’s the point when you can no longer see her smile, the one you fell in love with? How much do I truly love her?

Foreword

Hello~! My name is EvilDeerPrincess, in case you haven't read any of my stories before. And this is my fourth fanfic here on AFF and I feel like it's going pretty smoothly so far, haha. Anyway, this story came to me one evening whilst listening to EXO's machine. The lyrics tell of a girl who is too perfect to not get closer to, even though they know she might not have a heart. I feel like Luhan, Kris and Jongin in this fanfic are trying to find their girlfriends' lost spirits again and their struggle to help someone who doesn't want help. I've been depressed myself and know how hard it is to allow someone to help you, which is the emotion I want to get out of this story, only from the helpers perspective. I really hope you enjoy reading it and that you comment and subscribe if you think it's any good. Comments always help to improve the writing and as my readers who have more power than you might think. Although I'm the author, taking advice from my readers is something I love to do! So, please, don't feel shy, okay? ^^

Anyhow, enough with my infernal blabbering now. Continue to the story instead! Have lots of fun and don't cry too much (like I did)! >_<

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libianno
#1
Chapter 5: You were right, it did get better as I went on but it still felt a bit too brief for me. I know it's done now but for future ref perhaps consider going a bit more in depth with youe concept. Maybe have one leading couple and two supporting on the sides.

Anywhoo, it was well written so keep up with your good writing.

Hope you've been better lately. I'll go have a look at your other stuff :)
libianno
#2
This is very well written, but I won't lie to you; it's a bit too melancholy for my liking.

I totally understand where you are coming from with this storyline and in fact, it's really meaningful. So maybe just keep your storyline buy make it ao that it's angsty but not as much as it currently is.

And maybe have it about one exo member and his gf but having 3 oc's going through the same thing (more or lss) just makes the gloom gloomier.

Again I say, this is very well written. I'd just suggest a few minor changes to make it more readable.

Goodluck :)