Unlikely Treasure by Annyong

Review by chocobella2

Title →  (10/10)

I have to admit, I like this title, it somehow appeals to me. And it's not so long that you won't remember it. It's short and catchy, so it'll stick in your head. It will be a story you'll remember. 

First Impressions → (15/15)

The way you wrote the description, it just moves me. It's very dramatic and well written. Your poster and background is a very good asset to your story because it gives me a glimpse of your story, without reading the description. My only problem is that the foreword is quite long. But I understand why, it's the prologue of your story, right? Your foreword and description though, isn't bare, and it gives great detail without revealing too much. So overall, you did amazing in this category! ;)

Language → (15/15)

After reading your story, I barely located any grammar, punctuation, or spelling mistakes. The only ones I did find, I assume they were just typos. And you're vocabulary is pretty decent sized, you don't use the same words constantly. Which in my opinion, is a great quality for an author to have. :) Another perfect score.

Flow and Consistency → (13/15)

You did pretty well in this category as well. Your story flows smoothly, it's not difficult to understand. But I gave you a 13 because I think you have a lot of transitions in each chapter. For example, you go from Jinyoung, to Zico, then back to Jinyoung, and so on. Get what I'm trying to say? But other than that... I would say you did great when it comes to flow and consistency.

Storyline → (14/15)

I think you executed your plot pretty well so far. But I'm not quite understanding why they call him a pet. It's either I missed something because of my stupidity or you didn't explain enough. However, I would say that you are delivering your story fantastically. You're staying on track, you're not throwing in the most randomest of things. It makes sense, it's not a big jumble. So good job (again).

Characters → (12/15)

I wasn't really sure how to evaluate you in this category at first, considering that you didn't give any character descriptions. But you described them very well throughout your story, so I can get a good sense of what they're suppose to be like. For some characters, example, Zico, I understand exactly. A tough guy, if I'm not mistaken. But some characters, like Jinyoung, I'm not quite understanding. His personality confused me a bit, I'm not sure what he's really suppose to be like. So for this category, I gave you a 12.

Entertainment → (10/10)

I must say, out of the many fanfics I have ever read, I've never read a story like this. Your concept, your plot, they are very unique. It most definitely stands out. I look forward to your future updates :))

Total (89/100)

aMaZiNg! Please excuse my weirdness XD. But I'm being serious, you did absolutely positively, supercalifragilisticly awesome! Sorry, is this review too short? OTL 

Reviewed by Chocobella2

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