Different ways to surprise

Description

Some silly sequel for two of my favourite OC characters :)

Its kind of a next step in relationship for: 

Onew/ Lee Jinki (SHINee) & OC (Conny) from "Memory Lane"

and

T.O.P/Choi Seung-hyun  (Big Bang) & OC (Kritika) from "Colour Splash"

(first parts can be found in "For my Friends with Love", but still readable on its own)

Foreword

No need for that, lets go straight for the story! XD

(You know what to epect already anyway)

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Undankbar #1
Chapter 4: OMG THOSE BABIES SCARED THE CRAP OUT OF ME!!! O___O
where do you find something so devilish!?

and yay for the wonderful life of Kriti!!! :D
Mistral #2
@pauline33: re 1 message: this what tags are for, there are no rule that the poster should have characters in it.<br />
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re 2&3: this was written as the snap-shot after previous stories, what is clearly stated in description, plus it was done specialy to people I know, and they know what is what in the fic and why.<br />
As for mistakes, I surely have not done them on purporse (Eng being not native for me). But seeing how many typos you did yourself, you probably should understand how it may happen.<br />
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BUT looking on the fact that the your 3 comments was posted on the same date I had run into very unpleasant conversation with someone(described in my blog http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/42344) and you are actualy a friend of that person, I can draw a very safe conclusion of why you wrote what you did and do not take it to heart.<br />
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But I agree, I still should have done better job for those lovely people I wrote it for!
pauline33 #3
edit properly and maybe readers wont be turned off completely by the lack of a thorough editing job.<br />
btw..this is just a ff so people dont have the guarantee and security that this ff is a good story and that they arent just wasting their time, therefore a description and foreword are need.
pauline33 #4
umm..ur first chapter doesnt start off really interesting, so it doesnt capture the reader's attention. secondly, there are a lot of mistakes e.g. "Don't take her wrong" how can yu take her wrong?? dont yu mean "Don't misunderstand/misinterpret her" or something like that?? and also "...to come with something original..." are yu saying that they physically approach yu and give yu something? if not, yu should have said "...to come UP with something original..."<br />
there are a lot of mistakes, this is just a few.
pauline33 #5
yur poster isnt very good since it doesnt really tell yu anything bout the story and it doesnt reveal some of the characters in it so the reader doesnt even noe wat they are reading,
Miyoko_Kato #6
hmmp. NO>.< <br />
I didn't read it. I swear I do not know that Onew's present was a star. I do not know that she tried so hard to leave hints on what she wants as "surprise". No. I didn't 'cause I'm not reading any OnewXother-people fic, I swear. TT^TT<br />
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