A Beautiful Lie

Big Bang oneshots/scenarios

 

The sun was setting. A riot of colors rarely observed in nature danced their way across the horizon and filtered into the clouds and water that occupied either side of that thin line.

 

Closer, there was a single red rose petal spiraling through the air, held by the gentle wind that controlled its dips and swirls as it moved from one side of the otherwise empty front of the yard to the other.

 

Closer still, there was a red clock propped against a stack of books. It was one of those digital things that displayed the time in flashing numbers on a contrasting background of black.  The books keeping the clock upright were all on loan from a local library, long overdue and never to be returned.

 

Never to be returned.

 

The finality of that thought struck like a train crashing into a china shop. Tears crept from the depths of tear ducts to line eyelids that had thought they would never be moist like this again. A heart that had been encased in its own personal block of ice for years beat painfully as sweet memories played through the mindscape on the wings of the knowledge of an imminent nevermore. Regret flooded veins that had felt like they carried nothing but ice. Cold hands began to shake and alabaster cheeks felt the surprising warmth of salt-laden tears. A fleeting herd of “what ifs” rose and disappeared in the space of one shuddering breath.

 

Blind panic and cold logic struggled for control of the overwhelmed mind. Every second lost was a precious gift that could never be recovered. Every heartbeat was another length won for the danger racing through the network of blood vessels beneath the flawless skin.

 

Tick, tock, tick, tock, tick…

 

A girl’s face haunted eyes that would soon close for all of eternity. High cheek bones, silken caramel skin, brown eyes that could flash lightning at times and Cupid’s bow lips that were as soft and red as newly bloomed rose petals.

 

The sun disappeared from sight.

 

With it went the warmth of the body in the chair.

 

 

> I know this is short, but I wanted to try something slightly different from my usual <

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sreana11 #1
Chapter 39: update please
msvickie
#2
Chapter 39: Love it! Loved how you slowed down the pace for readers with the way you put your descriptions together. I literally felt there was a time freeze right before the sun dips underneath the horizon. Everything around you is clear and vivid right before you die. The best line for me was "train crashing into a china shop". It's like a rude awakening amongst all the serenity. Yes, it's short... But perfectly short & beautiful!
topwife #3
Chapter 25: revenge is always sweet!
msvickie
#4
Chapter 38: Omigawd... It's been too long! I've forgotten how beautiful you write! The analogies... The metaphors were on point. Felt like I was reading poetry, lol. It was great! Thank you so much for this one shot! I felt every bit of the character's awkwardness and sad sorry attempts to fit in... Made me have flashbacks for a moment >.<

And meeting Tobae? I would've died! This girl is definitely braver than me! This story seems unfinished, now that I've had a chance to think about it. Sequel!
simplYBe
#5
Chapter 38: This is not the Vickie I know! She would have jumped YB the moment she saw him, especially with the eyesmile! Hahaha
msvickie
#6
Update! Update! Update! Is it YB's turn?!!? Yes! I think so... ^.^
msvickie
#7
Chapter 37: UGH! You're killing me! All these sad stories... at first I think she's a psycho you know what! But even then... towards the end, I still think that, lol. I think it's because of my POV on suicides and whatnot and not a reflection on the story itself. But her running away and grinning didn't help in my mind either. Cue psycho music!

As usual, story is well-written. Choice of words are great. But I can't help but feel like we've read this story before almost. It's very similar to the other Tabi story kind-of - in which his girlfriend is in the hospital because of an eating disorder. I know (different subject) but almost the same vibe (him feeling helpless).

And then there's Teddy. Why is he helping her? I just want to strangle him. "Stand by her no matter what" - makes me believe those five years meant a lot to him. But this?! Omigerd... He's s/b the older, logical one too... If it was another character, maybe I'd believe it. But not Teddy. =[
Intensified #8
Chapter 37: This was so good!
Shizaya #9
Chapter 36: I'll miss you too. Have fun, k?