Chapter 20: You must update. I command you to UPDATE !!!!!!!!!

Chapter 14: Haha thanks for clearing that up. Yeah, I was super confused because I say that the story got updated but it was chapters I had already read!! Anyways, I hope you update soon! ㅅ.ㅅ

Chapter 1: hi dear:D I have hard time to read. Can you give some space or paragraph.. :( i'm sorry but if the story combine all together, made me dizzy

Chapter 14: Update soon:)^^ I like alr:)

Woah~ This story is getting really interesting!! I can't wait for the next chapter! (^_^)

Chapter 2: "... a group of amgry students" **angry :P i'm just being an annoying girl now, aren't i? xD

haha omg xD Singaporean accent xD 'dare to stare is it?' xDDDDDD wheee~~~ i'm being a hyperactive person now :P

Chapter 1: 'can't they just find another nerd to play on" **pick on :P

"... their taunting and craps" **crap :P

"Don they feel..." **Don't :P

'I' captilasation :P

"Why cant anybody..." **can't :P

"to male things worse, ..." **make :P

i think you know all the punctuation things haha xD


"you just let them swipe you here and there," i think shove is better? haha (:

"the person that belongs to voice quickly rush up to you" sounds abit weird >< the owner of the voice? haha

"you sigh in relief" **sighed. but if you're writing in present tense then o.O

"and you can just leave with it?" **live :P

"I could only look at him..." i thought it's in general pov?

haha sorry. i sound so mean now >< but i guess you're typing this out on your phone right? cos your paragraphing is not coming out... lol

but not bad!! ^~^ just need to fix paragraphing and some spelling/capitalisations/puntuations mistakes (:

FIGHTING :DDDDDDD

"wait.. if his not new here," He's** haha xD and the captilazations and punctuations got some wrong :P

This seems nice, I'll be waiting for you to update it ^^