Hey guise erm... Sorry but erm... Wait I don't know how to say this but erm I kind of sent this story for a review and this was what the reviewer said :    Poster: None!    Baby, what I am about to say you probably won't like.   I will start by saying this that you need to rebuilt your whole story.   Honestly, this doesn't even count as a story. This is just some lines you have threw in to make a plot.   This doesn't have  a starting point, no virtual explanation, no organization or logic.   Let's start by facing the first problem: 27 oppas. Was it really necessary to put all infinite, Teen top, B1a4 and Ze:a in there? how do you even explain that? if you felt like putting your bias groups together. You could have chosen the top two at most. But handling 27 is a bit too much don't you think?   2nd Problem: The cliches. So far you have included all the cliches known by a fanfic writer. You have put:   1. Parents dead   2. Orphanage   3. Getting Adopted   4. Superstar/ idol oppas   5. Filthy Rich   6. Gangsters   7. Enemy that turns out to be long lost frineds.      (P/s: I said idol like not idol oppas -.-)     3rd problem: The logic. The girl sees 27 people trying to adopt her who are barely adult and she agrees? The parent's would be out for few years?    When a person meets someone new, they don't start acting all chummy with them. It takes time, trust and a lots of talk to be able to t