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my dear ji yeon!
Sunday... - yoboseyo? - My...ung...soo, have time? -Of course my baby girl, what do you want^^, are you sick, oh my god, you sick, right... -no...I...I...let's break up, myunggie, i...don't love you anymore. Ji yeon's voice is lower. Her heart's hurt so much, she's breathing heavily, her eyes are redden, she's gonna cry, soon. Myung soo is speechless. He didn't believe what ji yeon had just said. - jiji, it's no...t fun...ny, don't..._he tried to speak. - no, it's real, myungsoo, face it, i don't love you, i have a boyfriend now, hjs name is... - WHO? Who is he, i wanna know? Myung soo shouted, he...mad? -hjs name is Seung Ho, remember it- ji yeon shouted back. After that, she threw the phone and cry...all night.
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Lucybabie
#1
Chapter 7: Your story is super cute <3 i luv it <3~~~~~
dream_keeper88
#2
Chapter 7: Hi. It's Monday, time for project spread the love!

Tbqh, the lack of proper punctuation marks (ex. "quotation marks" to mark dialogues) and paragraphs make it really difficult for me to read your story. But at least you tried ^-^ and you finished it. Don't worry, this can be improved.

My advice is for you to type or transfer all the chappies in MS Word. Turn on the spell and grammar check. Then get a book and look at the format. How to write dialogues, use of spacing, paragraphing...etc. The plot may be a bit cliche but with proper execution and flow, your story would be much better.

Good day!
poweroftwo #3
keep writing!! ill love it
yesungjiyeon #4
Chapter 7: nice story :)
MrGoldfishEyes
#5
UPDATE!!
xuxu_kut3_99 #6
Please update soon<br />
myungyeon #7
update soon :)
myungji_luv #8
i'll edit and put pjx later^.^<br />
@usmytaz: thks for commenting.
usmyiaz #9
wahhh!! update soon,... >_<