Chapter 3: I know im a bit late for discovering this, but please update, the story is good. I love the way you write. And im really interested to know what will happened next. Ogad theres still seventeen and i love seth and leah alreadyyy. I ship them together. I hope you finish the storyy. I would definitely recommend it to my friends. But author u need to update pleasseeee. Gad so many scenarios going on in my mind XDDDDD

Chapter 1: Okay I am so sorry this has taken me so long. I'm going to a con in like a week and I've been crazy busy getting stuff ready and working extra shifts at my job to have money for it. So here is my quickie, first impressions review of your story. I think you have a lot of potential as an author and I commend you for not only creating two original characters, but for also creating such an elaborate setting and world for them. I will say that 1st person is probably one of the most difficult things to read and write and it shows a bit in this story. I've noticed that many authors tend to trail off in their main characters own stream of thought too often when writing in 1st person because it is so easy to feel as if they are your own thoughts, this creates a lot of unnecessary detail in my opinion and you do that a few times. But fear not! We all have that problem, I'm positive my stories do it even without being in 1st person.
The last criticism I have is to watch out for being too larger-than-life or unrealistic with your characters. It's tempting to make them super impressive and flawless because they're your babies, you made them up and they are a part of you, but it leaves zero room for development and growth within the character. Don't feel bad about giving them flaws or something that they are just average at. This also applies to dialogue, but for the most part you do a good job of making sure to keep the dialogue context appropriate (meaning that the characters speak casually to themselves but to their parents or other authority figures they take on different speech patterns).
I look forward to reading more, seeing what changes you make, and how these characters grow! Happy writing! X3

Chapter 2: Hello,Sorry I took so log to review your story,I have not been on a computer (I'm on my tablet) so please excuse my spelling mistakes.First off I think that your story is starting off very nicely,Also I see you are very professional and that's qualities a reader would love to see in an author.Secondly the story has a lot of details and I understand why you put so many details,You want to help your readers understand.Lastly I love that you don't have many spelling/punctuation mistakes (Even though I don't really see any).I wish you success on your story,Good luck!

Chapter 2: Hi, sorry this took a while. I'm not used to reading beyond my fandom tbh haha. Generally speaking, your fic is clear and straightforward so that makes it easy to follow. It's a little excessively detailed though I feel, there are many things that don't really need so much explanation or description. Especially since this is written from a first-person point of view, the focus should be on the protagonist and how she feels rather than on a lot of description of what she sees around her, especially if it's not all that necessary. With such a simple setup for the later scenes, I would also expect the story to move along at a much quicker pace so as not to lose readers (especially new readers who want to see how your story develops before deciding whether to commit to subscribing or not). Especially about your characters, since they seem young and somewhat immature going off on a highly dangerous secret mission it's not helpful to pluck them out from a very "normal" setting with a home, and family etc. It's somewhat unnecessary and just gives you trouble when transposing them from a "normal" to an "abnormal" setting when you could have just jumped straight to action and letting the rest of your story fill in the gaps. Overall, your story sounds interesting but you might lose casual readers as they're unsure of who/what they're supposed to be following. Since Seth & Leah aren't real life people that readers can relate to, you'll have to use the story itself and the excitement of the scenes to convince people to stay on and read... which hasn't really been happening too. Don't be discouraged though, I wish you all the best in your writing :)

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Chapter 2: This is a really nice story .. Can't wait for the next story :p

Chapter 3: Oh wow! I haven't read a story that sounds this professional on aff in a really long time! I love this story, it sounds like it could be an actual book! lol There isn't anything I would really say to change or add at this point, this is story is really good that I just can't wait for the next update! I'm definitely going to keep up with this story! Good Job! Props to you, this is a really good story line!

oh hon, as much as I'd love to sub and read, i still can't because you see, i'm not into hetero fics (read: )
however, im wishing you luck! you are already having many subs and upvotes, it's wonderful!

Chapter 3: This is a very good story and I can't believe you kill my maknae Sehun. Also I think i'm shipping Seth and Leah... too cute!! Overall I'm impressed.

Chapter 1: Nice story! ^_^ Your writing is really good, the plot seems interesting, and you're one of the few authors on here who has good grammar and spelling. It's like reading a book. The writing is rich and detailed.