Brotherly Bonds

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How strong are the binds that tie siblings together. 

Can you let go of your past to find love or are the heartaches of the past going to hold you back.

 

This is the Story of Minjun, Jaebum and Hoseok.

Three brothers who have to let go of their past to find the way to love and happiness

Foreword

This is my first fic as a main author. 

I'm co-writting this with my niece so she can help me on my story transition.

 

 

A/N: Please excuse the bad grammar. I'm not the best writer but I love to write

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blackmelody #1
Chapter 2: I really hope vhope though!
Arashika #2
Chapter 2: OMG I just noticed you tagged the pairings! Ahhh 2jae and vhope are some of my faves :D though idk how it fits here... Due to jaebum and hoseoks past youngjae and Taehyung are going to have to be very mature and understanding and willing to take care of them.

/whispers/ 2jin is a very guilty pleasure of mine :P I never know how to characterize hyosang so I rarely write it myself lol.

Thank you so much for writing this story! I'm really curious as to where its headed next :D

Great job, keep writing~
faithshelost #3
Very nice.
Arashika #4
Chapter 1: (sorry I hit character limit so here's part two-)

I'm also wondering what the pairings are going to be now :D I see that Mark and Jackson are a pair, Wooyoung and Nichkhun, but who will Minjun , Jaebum, and Hoseok end up with? From the looks of things, Jaebum is going to need someone to take care of him, so a personal hope would be that he ends up with Jinyoung. Hoseok... if he's dancing, maybe Taehyung, Jimin, or Jungkook? (though tbh I kind of want Yoonseok- since he's friends with Namjoon apparently, maybe Yoongi is close by too?)

You may want to tag the main possible pairings in the story though. Some people don't check the tags for the group, just the tags for their specific pairing, so you might be able to get more viewers that way :D I know some people for instance that just creep on the Yoonmin tag all day lol. If you have a love triangle or something going on and don't want to spoil it just tag the possible pairings- but make sure it appears sometime in the story, otherwise you'll get readers complaining that you lied to them lol.

Anyways, this is really good! Can't wait to read more~

Great job, keep writing~
Arashika #5
Chapter 1: This seems like an interesting story! You have both of my bias groups (GOT7 and BTS, and I'm slowly getting into 2PM too ^^;) and I'm curious to see where this story will go :D

One suggestion though. While I personally also like the straight dialogue with no words in between, putting it in such large chunks like this can start to become confusing. It's a little hard sometimes to remember who's speaking when, especially when you're throwing in a lot of names that others might not know.

You might also want to add a little more description- like, for instance, how did he put the phone in his pocket at the end? Regretfully, absently, or maybe with a little sigh, wondering if he was making the right decision in going out that night? And why would he regret going to the bar? This would also help break up the dialogue. For instance, after Wooyoung says "whatever," you can add something like 'even through the phone, Minjun could hear the clear disapproval in his friend's voice. But they'd had this argument before, and Wooyoung knew better than to press the subject.' That's a personal thing though- it's just that I would like to see a little more detail in the writing.

Other than that... I believe JB's last name is Im or Lim, not Kim :D but I'm not sure how much that might change the story so maybe just leave it but make a note of it somewhere?

Anyways... this story looks great so far! Your writing is fine, don't worry about it! Sorry if my comments sound harsh, they're just suggestions on style mostly. I'll read regardless of what stylistic choices you make :D
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