Chapter 2

Brotherly Bonds
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After Jaebum left Minjun he headed to take a quick shower. As much as he loved his brother. He didn't always like him worrying about him. Pulling off his shirt he quickly jumped in the shower. He had to hurry before his best friend Jackson got there. Jackson Wang had been JB’s best friend since Elementary school. The Hong Kong native was getting picked on for his accent. Jackson looked so hurt but was too proud to cry in front of the bullies. So he walked away to the bathroom. JB decided to follow him. When he got to the bathroom Jackson was quietly crying.” Are you ok.” “ No, It’s not my fault that I had to move here and my accent is bad. I’m Chinese damn it.” “ Your accent isn’t that bad. Hello I’m Kim Jaebum but you can call me JB.” “ Hello JB. I’m Jackson Wang.” “ Hello Jackson. Let’s go. If anyone bothers you. Please let me know and I’ll take care of them.” That was the start of their long great friendship. JB trip down memory lane was cut short by the sound of knocking on the bathroom door. “ JB Hyung, come on, we are going to be late for our first class.” Jackson whined outside of the door. JB shook his head. Leave it to Jackson to find a way to get in the house. “ One second. I’ll be right out. “ Don't take too long or I’ll pull you out of the shower myself.” “ Whatever.” JB said as he heard the door open. “ JB Hyung. If you aren’t out in five minutes then I’m going to join you in the shower.” Jackson replied sounding a little worried. Jackson and JB had this weird friendship filled with skinship. For years everyone thought that the two of them were dating. But JB and Jackson would laugh and say “ I couldn’t love him this much if we were dating.” No one could understand what that meant. So they just blew it off as JB and Jackson’s strange friendship. JB was trying to get his head together from the nightmare and worrying about Minjun that he forgot his five minute deadline until Jackson opened the shower door and climbed in with him. Jackson was wearing JB’s swimming shorts. Jackson rubbed JB’s back. “ Hyung, what’s wrong.” “ Nothing, I just have a lot on my mind.” “ Come here.” Jackson said pulling his best friend into his arms. For most people this would be awkward but this wasn’t the first
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blackmelody #1
Chapter 2: I really hope vhope though!
Arashika #2
Chapter 2: OMG I just noticed you tagged the pairings! Ahhh 2jae and vhope are some of my faves :D though idk how it fits here... Due to jaebum and hoseoks past youngjae and Taehyung are going to have to be very mature and understanding and willing to take care of them.

/whispers/ 2jin is a very guilty pleasure of mine :P I never know how to characterize hyosang so I rarely write it myself lol.

Thank you so much for writing this story! I'm really curious as to where its headed next :D

Great job, keep writing~
faithshelost #3
Very nice.
Arashika #4
Chapter 1: (sorry I hit character limit so here's part two-)

I'm also wondering what the pairings are going to be now :D I see that Mark and Jackson are a pair, Wooyoung and Nichkhun, but who will Minjun , Jaebum, and Hoseok end up with? From the looks of things, Jaebum is going to need someone to take care of him, so a personal hope would be that he ends up with Jinyoung. Hoseok... if he's dancing, maybe Taehyung, Jimin, or Jungkook? (though tbh I kind of want Yoonseok- since he's friends with Namjoon apparently, maybe Yoongi is close by too?)

You may want to tag the main possible pairings in the story though. Some people don't check the tags for the group, just the tags for their specific pairing, so you might be able to get more viewers that way :D I know some people for instance that just creep on the Yoonmin tag all day lol. If you have a love triangle or something going on and don't want to spoil it just tag the possible pairings- but make sure it appears sometime in the story, otherwise you'll get readers complaining that you lied to them lol.

Anyways, this is really good! Can't wait to read more~

Great job, keep writing~
Arashika #5
Chapter 1: This seems like an interesting story! You have both of my bias groups (GOT7 and BTS, and I'm slowly getting into 2PM too ^^;) and I'm curious to see where this story will go :D

One suggestion though. While I personally also like the straight dialogue with no words in between, putting it in such large chunks like this can start to become confusing. It's a little hard sometimes to remember who's speaking when, especially when you're throwing in a lot of names that others might not know.

You might also want to add a little more description- like, for instance, how did he put the phone in his pocket at the end? Regretfully, absently, or maybe with a little sigh, wondering if he was making the right decision in going out that night? And why would he regret going to the bar? This would also help break up the dialogue. For instance, after Wooyoung says "whatever," you can add something like 'even through the phone, Minjun could hear the clear disapproval in his friend's voice. But they'd had this argument before, and Wooyoung knew better than to press the subject.' That's a personal thing though- it's just that I would like to see a little more detail in the writing.

Other than that... I believe JB's last name is Im or Lim, not Kim :D but I'm not sure how much that might change the story so maybe just leave it but make a note of it somewhere?

Anyways... this story looks great so far! Your writing is fine, don't worry about it! Sorry if my comments sound harsh, they're just suggestions on style mostly. I'll read regardless of what stylistic choices you make :D
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