Chapter 3

Brotherly Bonds
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When the sound of Hoseok’s alarm sounded he quickly grabbed his clothes and changed. Namjoon would be outside soon to pick him up. Throwing extra clothes in his bag he quickly ran out the front door.

Namjoon was sitting on the stairs talking to the Yoongi from down the street. Min Yoongi nicknamed Suga was a member of the rap club at the school. That was how Hoseok and Namjoon met him since Namjoon had always loved rapping. He spent a lot of time after school with Yoongi in the rap class while Hoseok was in the dance room. Hoseok knew that Namjoon had a crush on the older but he was going to let the younger know he knew.

 

" Good Morning Yoongi and Namjoon. How are you guys this morning."

 

" Good, I was just keeping Namjoon company till you got out here." Yoongi said picking up his backpack. " Are you ready to go."

 

" Yes." The other two replied.

 

They started their walk to the school. Hoseok was in his own world worrying about his brother Minjun. He had been working so much to take care of Jaebum and himself. It made him really sad that he couldn’t help his hyungs. He just put his headphones in and tried to get his mind off of the stress he felt like he was putting on his hyungs.

 

When he got to the school. He quickly said goodbye to Namjoon and Yoongi and headed for the dance room. When he got there he quickly his music and fell into his own little world.

 

After 30 minutes Hoseok grabbed his bag getting ready for his first class. He was going to take a shower before school started.

 

When Hoseok walked out of the dance room he saw Taehyung standing there.

 

Taehyung was this very strange and smart kid that everyone called an alien. No one really talked to him but for some reason Hoseok felt a understanding with him. After his parents died he never felt more alone. He never let anyone see him sad but one day freshman year Taehyung came up to him and smiled. " Hello, I just wanted to say hello and I hope you feel happie

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blackmelody #1
Chapter 2: I really hope vhope though!
Arashika #2
Chapter 2: OMG I just noticed you tagged the pairings! Ahhh 2jae and vhope are some of my faves :D though idk how it fits here... Due to jaebum and hoseoks past youngjae and Taehyung are going to have to be very mature and understanding and willing to take care of them.

/whispers/ 2jin is a very guilty pleasure of mine :P I never know how to characterize hyosang so I rarely write it myself lol.

Thank you so much for writing this story! I'm really curious as to where its headed next :D

Great job, keep writing~
faithshelost #3
Very nice.
Arashika #4
Chapter 1: (sorry I hit character limit so here's part two-)

I'm also wondering what the pairings are going to be now :D I see that Mark and Jackson are a pair, Wooyoung and Nichkhun, but who will Minjun , Jaebum, and Hoseok end up with? From the looks of things, Jaebum is going to need someone to take care of him, so a personal hope would be that he ends up with Jinyoung. Hoseok... if he's dancing, maybe Taehyung, Jimin, or Jungkook? (though tbh I kind of want Yoonseok- since he's friends with Namjoon apparently, maybe Yoongi is close by too?)

You may want to tag the main possible pairings in the story though. Some people don't check the tags for the group, just the tags for their specific pairing, so you might be able to get more viewers that way :D I know some people for instance that just creep on the Yoonmin tag all day lol. If you have a love triangle or something going on and don't want to spoil it just tag the possible pairings- but make sure it appears sometime in the story, otherwise you'll get readers complaining that you lied to them lol.

Anyways, this is really good! Can't wait to read more~

Great job, keep writing~
Arashika #5
Chapter 1: This seems like an interesting story! You have both of my bias groups (GOT7 and BTS, and I'm slowly getting into 2PM too ^^;) and I'm curious to see where this story will go :D

One suggestion though. While I personally also like the straight dialogue with no words in between, putting it in such large chunks like this can start to become confusing. It's a little hard sometimes to remember who's speaking when, especially when you're throwing in a lot of names that others might not know.

You might also want to add a little more description- like, for instance, how did he put the phone in his pocket at the end? Regretfully, absently, or maybe with a little sigh, wondering if he was making the right decision in going out that night? And why would he regret going to the bar? This would also help break up the dialogue. For instance, after Wooyoung says "whatever," you can add something like 'even through the phone, Minjun could hear the clear disapproval in his friend's voice. But they'd had this argument before, and Wooyoung knew better than to press the subject.' That's a personal thing though- it's just that I would like to see a little more detail in the writing.

Other than that... I believe JB's last name is Im or Lim, not Kim :D but I'm not sure how much that might change the story so maybe just leave it but make a note of it somewhere?

Anyways... this story looks great so far! Your writing is fine, don't worry about it! Sorry if my comments sound harsh, they're just suggestions on style mostly. I'll read regardless of what stylistic choices you make :D
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