Chapter 1

I can only say it in my heart

~yumi's p.o.v~

" yah! Yumi ahh! wake up! you're gonna be late for school!" I heard my mom yelled at me. 

I can't sleep last night because I feel sick last night. It's already like a daily routine to me. it start like 2 months ago since i felt like this. I don't really know why. I don't wanna go to hospital.

 

"YUMIIII!" my mom yelled again . "ARASSO!" I answer her. 

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I've done my shower. I still feel the pain. it really hurts.

I went to downstairs to catch up my breakfast. " good morning Omma" I said to her smiling. " you're late again. and you look pale too.. what happen last night? " my mom ask me. what? did I look pale? I shook my head

 

RING RING 

 

my mom answer the phone. I don't care who's calling because i felt realy REALLY sick.

"WHAT??" my mom yelled. I turn to take alook at her. she was about to cry . I widened my eyes . what happen?

"okay okay, I'll go now" my mom saiys in rushed. "Yumi-ahh, let's go to hospital now. your Grandmother's sick. " my mom said as she take her purse and drag me outside. 

 

I cough, there it is again. I hate this feeling. "what's wrong Omma? " 

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 We've finally arrived in the hospital now. I still don't know what've happen. My mom rushed to the counter to ask about my Grandmother.

they said she was in 645 room. we rush in there. when we've finally arrived, I really shock to saw there's a people in the white blanket. 

"O..O.Omm...ommaa what happen to... g..grandmother? this is not really her is she? " I ask my mom again. when I turn to my mom who was beside me earlier, my mom was crying . " y..your.. grandmother's d...dead.. n..now..I b..belivee..itt.." my mom said between crying

I widened my eyes.. what?! ouch! it's hurt again! no, don't , don't be today!

 

 

~DongWoon's P.O.V~ 

-where is Yumi? she's late again!- I thought when I saw what tiime is it. "yah! Dongwoon ah, where's Yumi? " Yoseob ask me when he saw me standing alone in front of the gate.. " I don't know either. maybe we should go to the class now. she'll come "  I told him.

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how was my first chapter? is it good? is it? is it ? is it? hee! ^^

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dontfreakmyboat
#1
hi ^^<br />
you have a really good plot and the suspence is working quite well, however you need to work on your grammar and spelling. it may not seem as obvious, but if you misspell words, forget to capitalize the first letter of a new sentence or use confusing grammar, it breaks up the story for the reader and it ruins the effect of the plot. another point to work on would probably be how quickly it moves along. the fact that her grandmother had a funeral the day after she died seems a little strange and puts off the rest of the chapter.<br />
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im sorry for being so picky but i still hope it helps > <"
Zeerahh #2
Thanks, Frozen. ^^
Zeerahh #3
Thanks! But I can't update now. my laptop are just... gah! I hate my laptop.. Im sorry.. But I'll update soon! no worries! ^^
EarthKid92195 #4
This fic is actually good! keep it up! :)Update too ^^