Reviewer: ForsakenAsherath || Story : Click

*I hereby announce that I am a terribly lazy reviewer. I already read your story a long time ago before you edit it and I almost gonna finish the review until.... Well, distractions appearing out of nowhere.


Title (3/5)

Title already gives of the 'Alice in Wonderland' motif and the eventual ty content. I won't say it's creative, though, and it can be cumbersome if you read it out loud.


Originality (3/5)

Love the fact that you're trying to incorporate both Alice and fantasy theme.


Description/Foreword (4/5)

Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Grammar (5/5)

Spelling (4/5)

Punctuation (5/5)

Diction or choice of words (5/5)

Vocabulary (5/5)


I enjoy the writing! Short and simple.


Characterization (6/10)

As of now, we can only determine the main characters' personality from the foreword. Eunhyuk and Siwon seemed like your typical incubuses, but Donghae's innocence (or benevolence, according to the foreword), however, was a nice allusion to Alice herself.


Flow (8/10)

Flow's good. Nothing wrong here.


Plot (6/10)

The plot is kinda lacking for now.



Enjoyment (6/10)

Overall Score (6/10)


Okay, since it's still the prologue I don't really have much to say. But it looks promising and full of potential.

But comparing this to the old PDtRH

The old one was kinda rushed and up until now I still remember how you wrote indecipherable as undecipherable. But a few months have passed and And I see your writing has matured!
Keep on practicing!

SORRY FOR THE LONG WAIT!

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