~Story Link~

Title: 3/5
I gave you 3/5 because well in the beginning, when I heard the title, I thought that the story would be ty! Also, even though the story isn’t completed and I can kind of see a relation with the story so that’s good but guessing from the tags, it’s going to have a happy ending and it’s going to be humorous. I think that you could have chosen another title which draws the reader more! But I thought of some titles which you could choose from:
(You don’t need to choose from these and you could choose your own, this is just some suggestions )
Pain in the derriere! (this is like your title just with bum in French, idk why but I thought it sounded more humorous.)
Pain in the -istant (does this even make sense? Otl… maybe it’s just me, if it does make sense, you could use it or you could just you “-istant”)
The headache called Luhan (idk about this one but yeah. Again it’s like yours but a bit more different and you can know who the annoying person is without reading it. That way it’s kind of teasing you XD) I hope this helped but keep in mind that you don’t have to change it!

Poster: 7/10
Well I liked the quotes, they were good and they set the tone of the story. Overall, the poster was nice. I don’t know if you wanted it to be simple or not but I thought the poster was quite simple. Oh and the photos of luhan and sehun, I don’t think they related that much to the story. They are wearing bow ties and are quite formal which suggests an office but I thought the photo on the foreword of sehun suited the story more. XD You could request at soralistic design if you want, they’re posters are really nice! ^ ^
Ummm, I just noticed that your poster isn’t coming up on the foreword. I don’t know if that’s intentional or not but yeah, just wanted to let you know.

Description/foreword: 12/15
I did like your description and I like the quotes, it set a tone on how hunhan’s relationship was going to be like.It’s just that I thought you could stress the importance of an assistant more. You could still keep your description just at the beginning write something like this and set it out like it’s from a dictionary: 
As-sis-tant ( -s s t nt) n adj
1. A person essential to Oh sehun
2. Someone who helps the other person and assists them; helper
3. Someone not like Xi Luhan

You could write something like that... obviously in your own words since you know the plot where as I’m just guessing the plot. But you get the point right?
Plot: well as it’s not finished, I can’t really judge but I like the sound of it ^ ^ so I’ll think I’ll give you 13/15!! I really like how they’re not immediately in love with each other! And from the quotes, it seems like a kind of love-hate relationship but a humorous one! XD I wouldn’t think that this was the most original and unique fanfic ever but who knows? It could be later~ 
But you know you could make it more humorous and have kris or tao or anyone really teasing Luhan about how he isn’t the smartest and playing tricks on him! I also adore Hunhan so yeah!! I’ve read LOADS AND LOADS of hunhan fanfics… *coughs*rated m too *coughs* so yeah. I also like how in chapter 2 … I think, forgive me if I’m wrong otl… Kris finds his own brother adorable! I found that so cute~ I also really like tao’s character and how he thinks Luhan has a girly body! 

Structure: 9/10
I think everything was really fine and understandable; nothing extremely bad. You also didn’t use the word “said” over and over again so well done on that! That made it more interesting! You could use different words that describe certain things. Just look at a thesaurus. 
In the prologue at the start (His morning has already started awfully. A coffee stain decided to decorate his white blouse…) you could have switched the full stop with a colon as it’s a list and that way it flows better.
Instead of putting photos of the uniform that Luhan has to wear, you could actually describe it. Personally I don’t like it when author’s put photos; I think it kind of stops the flow. Also, it lets the reader imagine it rather than just mentally saying “there it is”. But that’s my opinion and some readers do like photos but I would rather you describe the uniform. 

Spelling: 10/15
In the description: 
“Sehun is the yougenst CEO” youngest 
“But what if the one and only person he can actually rely on decide to move?” Decides (I changed it and added one and only, without it, it doesn’t sound right)
Prologue: 
“So-Ra was a weak woman, she wasn't like other girls, she didn't had kidneys” have (you could also change the first comma to a colon and take out the whole “she wasn’t like other girls as some other girls may not have both kidneys ^ ^)
“So as an enfant she had to stay in the hospital” infant
“It was a accomplished surgery” an instead of accomplished, I would use successful as it doesn’t really make sense with accomplished.
Chapter 3
“Your leg is healing quit fast “ quite
Chapter 4: 
"Sorry, I was looking for a new receipt." Honestly, I was confused with this, but I think you mean recipe
“Luhan nearly jumped a hole in the roof” ummm… this doesn’t really make any sense but you could write “Luhan leapt out of his chair, clearly capable of making a hole in the roof.”
Chapter 6:
“Luhan wandered trough the busy streets” through
That was it really! But as English is not your first language it’s okay but next time, you should read it again or just ask me to read it for you again ^ ^ I wouldn’t mind! XD

Enjoyment: 14/15
I actually really liked it!! I subscribed too!! ^ ^ AND IT’S HUNHAN!! I can’t wait to see how their relationship progresses in the fanfic!! XD I only gave you 14 because of the spelling mistakes but you can always improve! <33 keep updating and I wish you the best of luck with this fanfic! <333 

~Clandestine_