Chapter 6: Forevermore is an existing word; there is a song titled Forevermore and it's in the dictionary so... haha;;; but thank you for the suggestion! The title was to allude to Chanyeol's love for Baekhyun - "I love you Baekhyun, forevermore" (last sentence of his letter) but I guess it's easy to mistaken that as a description of Chanyeol's immortal state. As for the use of contractions, it was to play with diction and syntax - using contractions lends a conversational tone to the writing , and the overall vibe and tone of Forevermore was supposed to be warm and friendly (thanks to Baekhyun's character) so that's why I used them to convey specific emotions present in the fic. Plus, I know you aren't supposed to use contractions in formal essays and all, so I don't, but stories, I think I want to lend myself that freedom :)
That Cinderella comparison - I laughed! But in all honesty, Cinderella was not the source of inspiration for his character; I haven't watched that movie since elementary school to be honest so that didn't even cross my mind while I was writing. All of my characters are tied to me personally either as a reflection of myself or through the desire of people I would like to meet, and both Chanyeol and Baekhyun were the latter. But I liked that you pointed out I introduced Baekhyun without mentioning his name! You're the first to note that :) As for Chanyeol being immortal, I plan to elaborate upon that in the epilogue.
Anyway, thank you so much for taking your time to complete this review! I loved that you mentioned themes (it was a first) and that you were honest and transparent with your review. I have credited in the foreword of my story!
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Chapter 4: Hello! Thank you for the useful review you gave me :3
To start off, yea I know the title isn't that original :3 In a way, I liked the sound of it, and the number a thousand was something both common and familiar hence why I chose it. If it were to be another number, it would sound a bit awkward :3 And as for description and foreword, I don't like giving out too much information hence why I kept it short and simple. As for the missing periods, I used that to keep it flowy, almost like a stream of conciousness to show the thoughts of Woohyun. Though I do agree about the 'human' part! Thinking about it, it would make a bigger impact as for the reasons you mentioned so I'll keep that in mind! As for the plot/flow section, I tried not to make the story drag on. For the first part, I did realise it was a bit tedious and boring however I didn't want to push on too quickly as it wouldn't be unrealistic. For the plot, yea the 'fight' XD honestly, at that point I wanted to show Woohyun's 'frustrations' if you may call it. I couldn't think of another way to show that side of Woohyun hence why I did the fight, though now you mentioned it, it does seem a bit forced ^-^ it was actually my first time attempting something like that so yea :D I'm glad you like my wrting style though! It was my first try to do something like that and I'm somewhat glad I didn't come off as awkward haha :3 And for the characters, I'm glad you understand Woohyun! It was hard to pull him off, but I'm happy that you realised my intentions - honestly, it was hard thinking that I may have complicated him a bit XD as for Sunggyu, it was true that I kept his appearances to a minimum as I wanted people to imagine that type of person he was without relying too much on Woohyun - though I'm guessing I may need more work though :D
I'm thankful for the review! It helped me a lot in aspects I didn't consider so thanks for sparing your time to write it :D and I didn't expected the story to be feautred XD yehet!
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