Chapter 3: Oh my god i was crying the whole time reading from chapter 1 to 4. Every sentence every word you wrote is worth my time spending here reading your story. Definitely you're my one of best favorite authors
Chapter 4: Ahhhh my heart my feels my tears my everything authornim whyyyyyyy this is soooo sad the way they talk is so heart piercing i cried i love you so much authornim
Chapter 4: Beaitiful, beautiful writing style! But because you go for longer sentences, with multiple clauses, you should make use of more punctuation marks: comma(,), semicolon(;), colon(:), even the dash(-). Also, some order of clauses could be rearranged to flow better; read what you've written out loud to help with this. I love the way you wrote in both Chaerin's and Jiyong's POV. The plot was nice, the descriptions exquisite! Not many people can describe emotion (especially not one as complex as love+betrayal) and do it as fluently and vividly as you do. Sorry, I didn't mean to go all English teacher on you. Oh did I mention I like it? You could probably tell, right~ (^_^)
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