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Title: (O/5)
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veinless #1
Chapter 14: Thank you so much for correcting it with your opinions! You also asked me do I proof read; my answer is yes. But it's more like "skim". And I use the Aus-Eng dictionary so spellings are different but that's okay.

You've marked my grammar as poor, and of course you're right. This is extremely poor grammar in terms of standard narrative writing structures. However, since I'm not using the standard structure it's arguable. The reason for this is because I'm thought processing with stream of consciousness as my narrative mode. Although since I'm not using this narrative technique in first pov, I'm kind-of abusing it. But the bit where you corrected my it's/its/'s was honestly my fault since I didn't catch the mistake. There are a lot of things in my story I do on purpose, especially when it comes to punctuating and the dialogues. I only punctuate when I feel the reader should take a pause/stop, I don't punctuate to make it grammatically correct. My dialogues start with a lower case letter because it's not a finished sentence. (But everyone has their own opinion about grammar).

My title is a give away for readers who like to do these "before reading" exercises (laugh). A fig tree symbolises security and prosperity so it's obvious Myungsoo is insecure and trying to look for things he can depend on - therefore it relates to Myungsoo in aspect of security. Prosperity is another symbol of money, and since Myungsoo's a e of some sorts, the wealth relates to his clients. There's a lot of symbolism in that one page already so I thought it wouldn't be so vague (laughs).

Mm, I believe they never loved each other. The reason why Myungsoo let himself into the life of ion was because he thought Woohyun would give him love. In which, Woohyun does give him hope but not love. And when Myungsoo realises Woohyun can't give him what he wants, Myungsoo ends up hating Woohyun who can't save him. (Since Myungsoo's quite spoilt throughout the story).

Thanks again! :D
Paradisezxc #2
Chapter 13: Thank you for the review
Jinhwanderer #3
Chapter 11: These are sure helpful! Thank you very much! I credited you :))
Lovex2254 #4
Chapter 10: Picked up! I'll credit when I get on the computer. To answer your questions:
Cameo is Ira. In the last chapter, her dream shows that Tao went back to save Ira. This is also shown when Cameo talks to Tao and puts the pieces together.

The reason the Dictator didn't do anything when they were talkin was because Cameo/Ira had the pandant. She told him to sit and he plopped to the floor since he was also a citizen of EXO and therefore affected by the stone.

The feelings that Cameo killed a lot of people was Ira's feelings of guilt that EXO's destruction was her fault.

I actually plan to make this a trilogy (and already have the prequel in the works) which is where most question I hope will get answered. The prequel shows more thigs and explains what happens before and the sequel will ultimately describe the "what now" after they lock up the Dictator.
momodays09 #5
Title: Last Breath
Author(s): momodays09
Genre/Themes: sad, angst
Progress: completed
Number of Chapters: 4
Rating: N/A
Characters/Pairings: Kris, OCs...it's not a love story, so there isn't any REAL pairings
Brief Summary: The story revolves around three people. Saehee (OC) who is a terminally ill patient. Yuri (OC) who is the loving older sister of Saehee. And Kris, the famous idol who is also one of the leaders for EXO. The story is basically a journey of realizing that the smallest, little acts of kindness could make a difference in people's life.
Story link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/597465
Anything else: umm, I guess you could say I'm fluent in English..
Password: infiniteogs

Thank you ahead of time :)
EunHae986 #6
Chapter 9: I read your review and it was awesome! Thank you very much~!
veinless #7
Title: The Fig Tree
Author: white-sheep
Genres/Themes: angst!AU
Progress: complete
Number of Chapters: oneshot
Rating: (M/NC17) there are trigger subjects but they aren't really graphic
Characters/Pairings: woosoo
Brief Summary: Myungsoo has been looking for things that don't exist.
Story Link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/619284/the-fig-tree-angst-infinite-myungsoo-woohyun-woosoo
Anything else I should know about/Extras: nope but I am fluent
Password: infiniteogs
expiredpieces #8
Chapter 8: Despite the fact that this was a short story you reviewed it thoroughly and wow

I totally get you on most things all but one

Kyungsoo was made out to be like that because he's desperate. I made it so that it only shows what kyungsoo sees. Well I tried at lest, this fic is so old I only remember bits.

But what I mean is that I meant for kyungsoo to be alone and he really thinks that no one is there for him. He doesn't need a lot and because he's depressed, a hint of kindness means a lot. So that's why he didn't ask questions. He might've been snarky but he cared about Kai. He was all alone and when Kai made him feel like he wasn't, kyungsoo became abnormally attached. He didn't need to hear Kai's story because he was fine without knowing about it since it didn't affect the friendship between them. Kai's his last person so to speak and kyungsoo is attached out of the mere unfamiliar feeling of having someone to talk to.

I'm on mobile right now and late so I will credit in the morning~~ thank you again for the review. I might also add some things to say latter haha
Dohyeonju #9
i hope i can request soon.
informantxgirl #10
Chapter 7: Wow, 1st of all, thank you for a long & detailed review. Really enjoyed reading your insights. U pointed out many different angles & nuances that I myself couldn't see, so I thank you for that, & also for pointing out the errors (omo, can’t believe I got Sunggyu’s surname wrong! He's my ultimate bias!) You made a lot of good points about the abuse & how it might seem unrealistic for Hye In to have been like that at the end, but what’s interesting to me is that you read it as them being in love & the ending as being a happy one. I never intended it to be read that way, but there it is, writer writes 1 thing, & it’s read another way, it’s fascinating to me. I purposely left this whole issue as ambiguous as possible & for readers to decide themselves whether they stayed together because of “love” (whatever that means) or something else. I even put in the whole “Do you love me?” exchange to address this issue, because it was brought up very early on in a few comments & I did realize it was something to address. No, & abuse should never, ever be taken lightly; I hope I didn’t take them lightly, & I wish it didn’t come off like I did, but I guess with the story trajectory that I took & the ending, yeah, I guess it can be interpreted that way. I did try to show that it wasn’t just Myungsoo who was messed-up & sick, that they both were, that ultimately, they broke each other, & that’s why they had to stay together, because the addiction was too strong, or, for Hye In, well, there was never going to be another kind of life for her. When she’s back with her oppa, she just crumbles. Old habits & all. Anyhow, thx for bringing up those points. Really debated on the shifting POVs at 1st; ultimately, really didn’t wanna focus on just 1, so went w/ both. I do try to improve on that with every new story. “Formulae”=plural form of “formula”, & “hie” as in “to go quickly, or hasten”. All in all, thx for the review & I’ve credited you in my foreword. :D Have a happy new year!
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