Chapter 1: Yay! I really rather enjoyed the ending. That was a perfect way for Chunji to try and make amends and kudos to him for it. I really liked the way you played Neil here too. Tough love is a wonderful thing sometimes, especially when the other person is as oblivious as Chunji was. Though damn... With that rap sheet against him, it's no wonder L. Joe finally got pissed off. O.o

I think the only part that felt really rushed was the ending actually. The rest of it was decently paced and it made sense to have the time jumps so you weren't drawing things out unnecessarily. We're still back to the spelling and punctuation concerns (though the latter has gotten better) but they're only surface level errors that we can still infer the meaning from. ^_^ It's also a good use of the first person in this one too. Good job there.

Just a couple things to note with the elaboration thing I was talking about:

'I should never have bet with music involved...' Why? Were they rapping, singing, playing instruments, etc? What is L. Joe's superior edge over Chunji when it comes to music.

'...but my calls were blocked.' It's more semantics than anything else but did L. Joe actually block Chunji's number or was he just ignoring his calls?

'You pull on him like this all the time.' It's not wrong but the wording is... odd. I might suggest trying: 'You pull like this on him all the time.'

And again, it's not necessary since single dialogue words have their place too, but they're also great spots to add flavor/color/detail. hehe

Chapter 1: I love crossdressing Chunji ^^

aww this is so cute

Chapter 1: i like this

excuse me? are you a Filipino?

Chapter 1: Aigooo so cute.
although i thought chunji is a jerk for maaking my luvly ljoe do sucha bullshi* but at last, d ending was cute

Chapter 1: omggg sooo cute!! and i am sorry about her dog!!

Chapter 1: so cute !!!!!!

Chapter 1: Cute . Kkkk . I love this .