Black Noodles

Black Noodles

 Thursday: 2011 April 14: At The Restaurant

 “How many in your party?”

“2.”

“Follow me please!”

The hostess led the two to the back of the restaurant, sitting them in a booth.

“Your waitress will be with you shortly.”

“Thank you.”

She smiled sweetly toward Kevin and gave him a wink as she walked away.

“You’re prettier than her.”

“What? Why are you saying something like that?”

“Cuz you are…” Kevin blushed and looked down at the menu before him.

“Ok… I think I know what we should eat.”

“What?” Kevin continued to look at the menu, even though he didn’t have a choice in what he was to eat.

“Soondubu jjigae (hot and spicy soft tofu stew).”

“I think you should choose something else.”

“Why?”

“Do you know what today is?”

“April 14th, why?” Amy confusedly put down her menu.

“And what day is that in Korea?”

“I don’t know?”

“Yes you do, you and I used to celebrate it before you dated Eli cuz we were ‘so lonely’.” Kevin laughed lightly at the memory. They had made a pact when he graduated the eighth grade to celebrate it every year with her as long as neither of them had a “significant other.”

“Black day?”

“Bingo! And what do you eat on black day?”

“Black noodles.”

Kevin could never forget the first time they celebrated black day together. They ended up with more food on their clothes than in their stomachs. Amy was always known to use her hands when she talked and had accidentally started a mini food war between the two while telling a story about how her friend Liz got paint in the teacher’s hair earlier that morning.

“Good job! I knew you could do it!”

“Shut up! I may not be top of my class, but I can be smart too!”

Kevin smiled as their waitress came up to them.

“Hello, my name is Julie and I’ll be your waitress today. Are you ready to order?”

“No, not yet. Can we have some water though?”

“Sure, I’ll be right back with that!”

“I thought we were getting black noodles?”

“I changed my mind.”

“Why?”

“Because-“

Just then Kevin got out of his seat and stood next to Amy.

“What are you doing?”

He pulled her up out of her seat, taking both of her hands in his.

“You never wore something like this for Eli?”

“No…” Amy tried to pull her hands back, but Kevin held on tighter.

“You never forget anything people tell you, but you always tease me by ‘forgetting’ certain things.”

“Like what?”

“I’ve never seen you treat Eli as more than a brother, even when you were dating. You didn’t look at him the way you look at me.

“So?”

“So,” he took a step closer. Slowly he let go of one of Amy’s hands and gently brushed the hair that framed her face behind her ear.

“Do you like me?”

“What?”

It was Amy’s turn to blush. She liked him, a lot. She’s liked him since she moved to California from Korea almost five years ago.

Her reddened face was a good enough answer for Kevin. He tenderly crashed his lips into her soft pink glossy lips. It was innocent, yet longing like he has been wanting and waiting a lifetime for this. Unwillingly, Kevin pulled away and looked into Amy’s eyes’

  “That’s why we shouldn’t eat black noodles.”


awwww it's finished!!! hope you all liked it ^^

but (I don't mean to brag, seriously >.<) I'm so proud of myself! This is my first ever completed and 'published' fan fiction :D I can't believe I did it.

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zikyungxoxo #1
great story!
elishaed
#2
Awwww cuuuuute! I liked this a lot!
Elsweyr
#3
<3
HatrednAshes #4
Nice story :)
winterflowr #5
SO cute! Gah! Kevin is so sweeeetttt!
junhuidu #6
lol I'm single, but I refuse all presents from my friends on valentines day because I'd feel like I was cheating on Black Day when I ate black noodles xD Nice story about one of my favorite holidays :)
SecretStorywriter
#7
Oh yeah, btw, it would be even better if you included the desciption for Black Day somewhere. (Maybe at the bottom of the chapter in an author's note or something.) I didn't remember what couples do on Black Day and it wasn't until I looked it up that I realized how cute the ending of the story was. Just saying... :)<br />
(I hope you don't mind me critiquing your story this much.)
SecretStorywriter
#8
Chapter 4:<br />
He tenderly crashed his lips into her soft pink glossy lips. (But. but.. but... You don't "tenderly" crash lips. You just can'ttttt! Gahhhhhh noooooO~ You need to fix that because it's really contradictory!)<br />
Ok, I feel SUPER, SUPER mean for saying this, but I don't think this was your best chapter at all.<br />
I mean, the interaction between Kevin and Amy in the other chapters was so sweet and natural! In this chapter, it was more awkward than perfectly molding together.<br />
I think that it was more awkward because Kevin stood up, pulled Amy to her feet in the middle of a restaurant and asked her if she liked him. I mean, it just... GAH. It didn't fit well.<br />
I think that you have so much better potential than this chapter and that you rushed the events of this chapter too quickly which might be why it turned out like this. True, in the beginning, they took their time sitting in the restaurant and all, but the confession was so sudden.<br />
Other than this, I think that you have a really good story, and I'm surprised that you didn't have more readers. You did have a few grammatical mistakes and proofreading mishaps, but overall, it was a cute story.<br />
I hope you continue writing and do even better next time!
SecretStorywriter
#9
Chapter 3:<br />
“You’re mean!” Amy let go and began to pout. Leaning against the lockers she slid down to the floor./“Stand up, it’s dirty down there.” Kevin stretched out his hand. Amy looked up at him and shook her head./“Come on~”/He tried to pull her up from the paper-littered floor./“Not until you sa-“/“I’m sorry, you’re beautiful, and you’re cuter than a koala.”<br />
(I really loved this interaction. It seemed so natural!! I can't even begin to explain how this is pretty much the story of my life. XD I really loved the last line too: Kevin knew exactly what to say to her to make her feel better.)<br />
“What? You’re going on a date! You should know better. Kevin, you’re special. She wouldn’t even wear a skirt for Eli, much less heels.” (Oh, ummas know exactly how to embarrass us.)<br />
“Annyeonghakiseyo Mrs. Song!” (So polite!)<br />
“But you love me!!!” she shouted as she began to dance around in the rain.” (Haha~! This is so me.)<br />
“come here, you’re going to get sick.”/Kevin opened the umbrella and pulled her under it, wrapping an arm around her shoulder. (Kyahh! So caring~)
SecretStorywriter
#10
Chapter 2:<br />
Ahh! They're so cute, hugging each other and whatnot. ^^<br />
“Oppa~ can I ask you for a favor?”/“You need lunch money again?” (I love how Kevin knows right away what she needs.)<br />
“Shh! It’s ok tummy~ I won’t neglect you anymore.” (Puahahahaha!)<br />
Everyday oppa, everyday. (Lolol! I could imagine Kevin make that mistake often. Haha.)<br />
She’s prego! (Gahhh. That word annoys me so much. Aish.)<br />
“I’m pretty sure you’re name’s Kevin…” (Oh Amy... X] )<br />
“Oh~ …turtle babies.” (Huh. My friends and I usually say "awkward turtle".)<br />
Amy turned to her right and found her friend of several years sitting beside her./“Liz! When’d you get here? You’re in this lunch?” (I wish that Amy hadn't asked the second question. If they are such good friends, wouldn't Amy have known when Liz's lunch period was?)<br />
Wow - tightly knit group of friends.<br />
“Then we need to come up with a plan!” (I'm looking forward to this!)