UMMA!!!

Black Noodles

Thursday: 2011 April 14: End of school

“Hey oppa! Ready to take me to dinner?”

“Shouldn’t you be visiting Sunghyun?”

“I am silly! You, I’m visiting you.” Amy wrapped her arms Kevin’s waist as he finished putting his belongings in his backpack. “Oppa, you’re comfy! I feel like a koala.”

“You feel like an elephant and monkey the cross-bred.”

“You’re mean!” Amy let go and began to pout. Leaning against the lockers she slid down to the floor.

“Stand up, it’s dirty down there.” Kevin stretched out his hand. Amy looked up at him and shook her head.

“Come on~”

He tried to pull her up from the paper-littered floor.

“Not until you sa-“

“I’m sorry, you’re beautiful, and you’re cuter than a koala.”

Amy smiled and allowed her friend to pull her to her feet.

“So what are we going to eat?”

“Black noodles.”

“Aish… you’re so cheap.” Amy muttered under her breath.

“What was that?”

“Nothing~~~”

“I know what you said!”

He began to tickle Amy’s tummy. She’s a total spaz when she’s tickled. If he poked her in the right spot she would fall to the floor.

“O-oppa! Oppa ah~ st-t-top!”

“no, not until you confess!”

“I said ‘you’re so sweet.’” She wiggled and squirmed in his arms trying to break free.

“Nu-uh!”

Amy continued to laugh, and Kevin laughed with her. Eventually the little war subsided.

“Come on~ We’re going to the Korean House.”

“We’re going to your house? That’s not fair that’s cheating!”

“Goodness, you pabo… The restaurant, the one a couple blocks from school.”

“Ohhh… why’re you so mean to me today? …pabo my .”

-5.30 pm-

“Amy! Kevin’s here for you!” Mrs. Song yelled up the stairs. She was a tiny little ajjuma, but she had the voice of a fan girl at a Back Street Boys concert.

“Coming!”

Kevin patiently waited in the foyer and chatted with Amy’s mother.

The young girl came barreling down the stairs in sweatpants, a t-shirt and sneakers. She noticed Kevin when she took the last step off the stairs. He was dressed nicely. Not a ‘hey, we’re going on a date’ nice, but a clean put-together look (see the forward… imagine that but with no time and dark skinny jeans) that made her look like a slob.

“I thought we were going the Korean house?”

“We are.”

“I’m going to change…”

Amy rushed back up to her room, changing quickly and putting on light make up.

She reappeared at the top of the steps, capturing Kevin’s eye. Mrs. Song followed Kevin’s gaze and smiled at the sight of her daughter.

She was wearing a black skirt that stopped half way down her thigh and a lacey button up blouse, finished off with a pair of black velvet wedges and a black vintage army-style coat.

“You look much better.”

“Umma!”

“What? You’re going on a date! You should know better. Kevin, you’re special. She wouldn’t even wear a skirt for Eli, much less heels.”

“Umma! jebal , geuman~”

“ok ok. Have fun!”  She hugged Amy and gave a quick wink to her ‘date.’

“Kaja, Kevin.”

Amy pulled his arm leading him out the door.

“Annyeonghakiseyo Mrs. Song!”

Kevin quickly picked up his umbrella sitting next to the door before amy shut it on him.

“Oh, it’s raining!”

Amy ran past Kevin, into the middle of her driveway.

“You’re such a little kid.”

“But you love me!!!” she shouted as she began to dance around in the rain.”

“come here, you’re going to get sick.”

Kevin opened the umbrella and pulled her under it, wrapping an arm around her shoulder.

“Thank you.” Amy shyly wrapped her arm around his waist putting her thumb thru one of his belt loops.

“What should we eat tonight?”

“I thought we were eating black noodles?”

“We are, but I should buy you other food too.”

“Aww, you’re so nice! Mmm… I don’t know anything I guess. You know I like food!”

Kevin smile and rested his head on Amy’s. the rest of their short walk was comfortably quiet.


eh, I couldn't wait to update again! I kinda wanna just post it all but I'm restraining myself. I've had this story finished back in April, I just never typed it up.

Only one more Chapter!! yeah, this is a short short story~ sorry, but it wouldn't really go anywhere after what happens next...

anyway~ wouldn't you love to walk with Kevin in the rain like that??? I know I would adore that ^-^ I probably would kiss him right then and there. I don't know how Amy does it!

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zikyungxoxo #1
great story!
elishaed
#2
Awwww cuuuuute! I liked this a lot!
Elsweyr
#3
<3
HatrednAshes #4
Nice story :)
winterflowr #5
SO cute! Gah! Kevin is so sweeeetttt!
junhuidu #6
lol I'm single, but I refuse all presents from my friends on valentines day because I'd feel like I was cheating on Black Day when I ate black noodles xD Nice story about one of my favorite holidays :)
SecretStorywriter
#7
Oh yeah, btw, it would be even better if you included the desciption for Black Day somewhere. (Maybe at the bottom of the chapter in an author's note or something.) I didn't remember what couples do on Black Day and it wasn't until I looked it up that I realized how cute the ending of the story was. Just saying... :)<br />
(I hope you don't mind me critiquing your story this much.)
SecretStorywriter
#8
Chapter 4:<br />
He tenderly crashed his lips into her soft pink glossy lips. (But. but.. but... You don't "tenderly" crash lips. You just can'ttttt! Gahhhhhh noooooO~ You need to fix that because it's really contradictory!)<br />
Ok, I feel SUPER, SUPER mean for saying this, but I don't think this was your best chapter at all.<br />
I mean, the interaction between Kevin and Amy in the other chapters was so sweet and natural! In this chapter, it was more awkward than perfectly molding together.<br />
I think that it was more awkward because Kevin stood up, pulled Amy to her feet in the middle of a restaurant and asked her if she liked him. I mean, it just... GAH. It didn't fit well.<br />
I think that you have so much better potential than this chapter and that you rushed the events of this chapter too quickly which might be why it turned out like this. True, in the beginning, they took their time sitting in the restaurant and all, but the confession was so sudden.<br />
Other than this, I think that you have a really good story, and I'm surprised that you didn't have more readers. You did have a few grammatical mistakes and proofreading mishaps, but overall, it was a cute story.<br />
I hope you continue writing and do even better next time!
SecretStorywriter
#9
Chapter 3:<br />
“You’re mean!” Amy let go and began to pout. Leaning against the lockers she slid down to the floor./“Stand up, it’s dirty down there.” Kevin stretched out his hand. Amy looked up at him and shook her head./“Come on~”/He tried to pull her up from the paper-littered floor./“Not until you sa-“/“I’m sorry, you’re beautiful, and you’re cuter than a koala.”<br />
(I really loved this interaction. It seemed so natural!! I can't even begin to explain how this is pretty much the story of my life. XD I really loved the last line too: Kevin knew exactly what to say to her to make her feel better.)<br />
“What? You’re going on a date! You should know better. Kevin, you’re special. She wouldn’t even wear a skirt for Eli, much less heels.” (Oh, ummas know exactly how to embarrass us.)<br />
“Annyeonghakiseyo Mrs. Song!” (So polite!)<br />
“But you love me!!!” she shouted as she began to dance around in the rain.” (Haha~! This is so me.)<br />
“come here, you’re going to get sick.”/Kevin opened the umbrella and pulled her under it, wrapping an arm around her shoulder. (Kyahh! So caring~)
SecretStorywriter
#10
Chapter 2:<br />
Ahh! They're so cute, hugging each other and whatnot. ^^<br />
“Oppa~ can I ask you for a favor?”/“You need lunch money again?” (I love how Kevin knows right away what she needs.)<br />
“Shh! It’s ok tummy~ I won’t neglect you anymore.” (Puahahahaha!)<br />
Everyday oppa, everyday. (Lolol! I could imagine Kevin make that mistake often. Haha.)<br />
She’s prego! (Gahhh. That word annoys me so much. Aish.)<br />
“I’m pretty sure you’re name’s Kevin…” (Oh Amy... X] )<br />
“Oh~ …turtle babies.” (Huh. My friends and I usually say "awkward turtle".)<br />
Amy turned to her right and found her friend of several years sitting beside her./“Liz! When’d you get here? You’re in this lunch?” (I wish that Amy hadn't asked the second question. If they are such good friends, wouldn't Amy have known when Liz's lunch period was?)<br />
Wow - tightly knit group of friends.<br />
“Then we need to come up with a plan!” (I'm looking forward to this!)