Chapter 8

For Better Or Worse

 



Chapter 8


You gripped his coat arm as he made his move, pulling him back with as much strength as you could muster.

"Choi Seunghyun, don't you dare touch that boy! If you have something to say, then you say it to me. Don't go picking on people weaker than you!"

Your anger was reflected in the chirping of the monitor.

Beepbeepbeepbeepbeepbeepbeep...

 

You should've seen yourself, _______.

You looked like a mother bear out to protect her cubs.

 

He rounded on you and grabbed your face, pressing his fingers into your bruised cheek.

Again.

Lowering his face to yours, he stared into your eyes.

"Talking back now, are we?"

 

You didn't struggle, didn't give any evidence of pain.

Only glared at him with as much hatred as you could muster.

"You get your hands off me, you... you..."

You started coughing, deep hacking coughs that didn't bode well.

 

He let go of your face, a look of disgust on his own.

No sooner had he done so than you covered your mouth with your hands, still coughing.

You were doubled over, your shoulders were heaving with the exertion.

A thick red substance dripped between your fingers and onto the covers.

Blood.

 

Alarms started going off, and your heart rate monitor was going haywire.

Beebeebeebeebeebeebee

Nurses rushed into the room, shouting instructions.

The one who'd let us in glared at us before rushing to your side.

 

I knew what she was thinking.

You've just signed her death warrant.

 

We were firmly escorted out of the room, but I could still see you from the open doorway.

You looked at me, eyes wide and pleading.

I couldn't hear you, but I could read your lips.

"M-Mian..."

To my horror, your eyes shuttered closed and you toppled back onto your pillows.

Your hands fell limply to your side, covered with blood.

The last thing I heard before the door slammed shut was a long, drawn-out whine.

Beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee...

 




 

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cherLynmyung #1
Chapter 12: Love this so much!! It's Si different from others ♡
KaiOlly
#2
Chapter 12: Well, author-nim I'm here to give you the review that I made for this story. Ok, here goes! :)

1. Fore word - 90/100

The foreword is good. It has pics and a good synopsis. The poster is nice to. The infos are good to. Noting much to comment really

2. Pictures - 90/100

The pics you put on the foreword is still not enough. I could only say that the poster suits well with the story. It give u the vibe :) Better you added in more pics.

3. Story plot - 95/100

I'm in love with your story plot! The story plot us well written and it's really interesting. The genre angst really works well with tis story. I say good one! :D

4. English - 96/100

It was a pleasant use of English that u used to describe it all. The English is not bad and the vocal is good too! I think that anyone that reads it would most likely find it pleasing :)

5. Writing style - 96/100

I sort of liked your writing style in this story! The way you write it, is easy for me to get the atmosphere, the feelings and to understand the whole story :) Although, there are a few parts that I find quite hard to catch, still it's something that you shouldn't worry bout.

6. Total markings : 93%

Some marks you got there! Overall, I think that this story is really amazing! I enjoyed reading this! It makes me want to read this non-stop, but unfortunately, I must stop and good thing must come to an end. The story has its perfect ending, even though it's a sad one. I liked it how you relate the domestic violence in this story and gave out advice for the readers, it's nice of you to do that. I shall say, thank you for writing this kind of story and madew me enjoyed reading it ^^~

Lastly, thank you s much for choosing 'Butter Review Shop' to review your marvellous fic! Hope that you are not offended/pissed/angry at me. So, we are still cool, yea...? :D See you next time! (^_^)V *sorry for the typos*
KaiOlly
#3
Chapter 12: Yes you are correct! 100% correct!
KaiOlly
#4
Chapter 11: Oh my gawd.... Seriously, this chap is really sad T.T I can't believe that she died. Serve Seunghyun rights for treating her that way. I wish that Myungsoo would just beat the hell out of him.
KaiOlly
#5
Chapter 2: OMOG! Myungsoo and a marred woman?! How bad can he get? ^^
KaiOlly
#6
Chapter 1: Nice 1st chap! It's really....short and simple :)
JungChaeWon #7
Chapter 2: Omg i love your poster!!! Nice fic!!
-2Mirae-
14 streak #8
Chapter 12: This story is so sad!!! I hate how there are those type of people in this world T.T i feel sad for her and her children and L.....
Anyways..... I cried in almost every chapter ;A; ♥
cuteheartbreaker13
#9
Chapter 12: I luv the story but its sooo sad TT^TT
inSHININGspirit
#10
Chapter 12: OMG this is the first story which i read which made me cry. :') I agree that domestic violence is not a joke. i really love your style of writing btw. ^^