Did It Mean Anything To You?

Title: 2/5

Your title was too long. A title is supposed to be eye catching and short, and enough to explain some part of the plot, but not enough to explain what the whole story is about. The title should also be reeling the reader into the story. It didn't do any of these things to me. It was too long, and it was uneccessary to add 'YeWook Twoshot' in the end. You could've just tagged it, which you did, so you really didn't need it in the title. 

Appearance: 15/15

I honestly loved the poster. I really liked how happy the characters were, like in the ending. Your font was readable, and it wasn't an eyesore. The colors were simply perfect for the story. Great job to the designer, Ayomie. 

Characterization: 9/10

I really liked the characters. I liked how Yesung grew from being an insensitive person to a person who realized Ryeowook's true feelings. Even though I'm not an ELF, I enjoyed the story a bit more than I enjoy my biases stories (coughBAPcough). You were consistent with your characters, and even though there were only two chapters, the change of Yesung's heart was not surprising, which is a good thing. 

Foreword: 10/20

You used the foreword as an author's note. I ask you, why? The description was perfect! I was completely drawn to the story, and I really loved how fluffy it was! The foreword though..../sobs. You could've just put a line or two in the foreword, and I'll be as happy as Kyuhyun when he plays Starcraft. 

Storyline/Plot: 20/25

I haven't read twoshots like this one, so great job in being unique. There was no definite storyline, since there were only two chapters, but I get the main idea. Yesung does something involuntary. Yesung apologizes to Ryeowook. Ryeowook accepts Yesung's apology. A reader has to know at least the main idea, and you succeeded in that area. Good job. 

Writing Skill/Technique: 9/10

"Now Sunggie, watch and learn. 'Cause you're about to lose like you've never lost before." 

Correct: "Now Sunggie, watch and learn because you're about to lose like you've never lost before." 

You can't start a sentence with a conjunction. A conjunction connects words, phrases and clauses. It does not start a sentence. 

Stupidness

Correct: Stupidity

Other than that, i haven't found any grammatical or spelling errors. Good job in editing your fanfiction! 

In expressing your characters, you were very descriptive. It was easy to picture Kyuhyun playing Starcraft, Yesung's hurt face and Ryeowook's smile. 

>> Total Score: 65/100