Chapter 3: Sometimes I wonder why people could write such super sweet words very beautifully and just like let them flow.. I'm so bad at that and you great!!! :''')

I READ THIS IN ONE DAY. WOAH THIS WAS REALLY GOOD. I'M GLAD I FOUND THIS ON THE RANDOM STORY BUTTON.

Chapter 3: It's so sweet I love this story please write more story's ill defiantly read them

Throughout the whole story, i like Junho's slap the most! When he slapped Channana, it was great!
Ok, so this is ur first fic so i won't be 'that' cruel, but giving u some nice comments.
1.I think that the way you write was very good, very emotional. But it was REALLY HARD to feel the story when you wrote TOO MUCH!
The passages was quie long and they make readers don't want to read.(Furthermore, the ink is green and I had to zoom to 200% to read easier)
=> You should write LESS and make the sentences even more simple than you did.
2.I love song fic!( Really much~). But you didn't make a balance song's lines for the whole story. 5 parts for chap 1, 2-3 parts for chap 2. And the last one, which should hold the most important part of the song, it was none...
Okay, I think that you must be quite young, like 16-17, so you can improve a lot in the future( since i did have the same way of writing like you when I was 14). GOOD LUCK!

chanho forever! <3
so cute, so sweet! <3

Heeeey, author-ssi do you have any livejournal account? :))