very, gooooood story!!!!!!!!!!! :D

Haha,okey thanks

This was really good! Keep up the good work. Even though I was confused sometimes, it was satisfying. :)

@BlackMusic OMMMMOOOOO!!!! CANT BELIEVE U COMMENTED!... whoeva u r.... .. I dunno WHY but I get SOOOOOOOOOO excited fo comments n u SUBSCRIBED!!!?!?!? god dang I could KISS U RIGHT NOW!!!
Ah the broken grammar thang, (I purposely write stuff like dey n dat but DUN WORRY! I dun do dat in ma stories) but U're prolly confused so here it is: the gal (you) is being held captive at your own place
Hope I win this contest! (Wish me LUCK!)
OH! And if you don't mind, and can and want to.. Try checking out my fanfic,"An I'll Fated Girl" Its completed! (yes I hate waiting too) but now I have the motive to write the story TODAY! thanks bro!

What's the story about? lol broken grammar btw update soon! :D