❤ kiki420
Little Warrior's Shop [Batch 2; Closed]
Reviewer: My_Asianless_Mind
Story Author: kiki420
Story Author: kiki420
Amount of Chapters: 11
Ongoing or Completed: Ongoing
Destiny?
title: Destiny, I like it. It's not too long and it gives off a mysterious vibe to it, like what is their destiny or something like that. 5/5
description and foreward: Now there wasn't a well explained description and foreword. It should give a little background on this band. It should be a little explained and put it in the CEO's point of view. It'll be a little better if you explain it a little more. 3/10
poster: Second thing. The poster should be based how the band is. Are they badass?, cute?, explain it more~ 3/5
chapter title: Chapter titles are simple~ time to rename them. The "numbering chappie" idea is kind of old fashioned. 3 /5
plot: Plot, most important next to the flow of the story. Since a plot was not well explained I can't say anything about it. Sorry. 3/20
flow: Flow, again like the plot, except that it never explains how each member felt being chosen to be in that group. Did they cry?, jump for joy?, celebrate? Or it can also become a fake twitter update! Try it out! 5/10
characters: The band members, I can easily tell that their maknae is very energetic. And is super cute and super adorable! But the other members, I can't define them. Take time to explain each character. 5/15
font: Times Roman, very nice. So classy and neat. I love it. 5/5
grammar: I'm really strict when it comes to spelling and grammar. Well done for grammar. 15/15
enjoyment: I'm excited next update! :D 10 /10
Sorry I feel like I'm bashing on your work.... This is how strict I get.. Sorry if you think I'm bashing on you.
Total: 57/100
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