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Three Years
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"Why don't you just tell him?" Yeojin questioned Haeyoung, truly wondering why her best friend hasn't just confessed yet. "I mean, it's been three years now!"

Haeyoung frowned and buried her face into her hands, she didn't feel like hearing Yeojin talking about her own love life right now.

"It's not that simple—" "Yes, it is!"

Haeyoung glared at Yeojin, who also glared back. "If you like him, then just tell him. What's the worst that could happen?"

"Anything. Anything could happen! What if he doesn't want to hang out with me anymore?" Haeyoung looked down at her hands, twiddling her thumbs around each other.

"You know he wouldn't do that. Jimin's not like that!" Yeojin retorted, feeling as if her best friend was just being silly now.

Haeyoung sighed loudly, really starting to get annoyed now. She stood up from her seat and made her way to the exit of the cafe.

"Where are you going?!" Yeojin called after her, but Haeyoung didn't respond.

She walked sadly as the cold, winter air blasted her in the face. Haeyoung really didn't care if she got sick from being out in the cold with no jacket, she just needed to get away from Yeojin.

For three years now, Haeyoung has been in love with Jimin. It started from their very first meeting...

The moonlight poured in through the windows of the university classroom as Haeyoung quickly tried to finish her final project that was due the next day.

Suddenly, her alarm rang, signaling that it was now midnight. "Crap! They're going to close the building now..."

Standing up, Haeyoung quickly gathered all of her belongings and stuffed them into her backpack before running out the classroom door. However, the poor girl failed to see the boy who was just about to enter.

"Oof!" Haeyoung landed on her bottom with a loud thud. "Ow..."

Rubbing her lower back, Haeyoung looked up at the person she just ran into and was immediately mesmerized. Who is he?

"Hey? Are you okay?" The guy asked, seemingly looking worried due to the fact he had to ask if she was okay three times now due to her not responding the first two times.

"Huh? Oh, uh, yes!" Haeyoung took the man's hand, getting off the ground with barely no effort. The girl blushed, realizing just how strong he was.

Finally realizing that she had just spilled all of the contents of her bag on the ground, Haeyoung quickly began picking up all of her personal belongings. "I'm so sorry for bumping into you!"

"It's alright," Jimin smiled. "I was just coming to see if there was still anyone in the buildi

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mikimika101 #1
Chapter 1: Wow that was dramatic.... In a good way. To be honest, this seems to be a confession from a long running novel, rather than a oneshot. Don't get me wrong, it's a nice oneshot, but it felt overly dramatic for the prompt. It was nicely written and I like your writing style, but there were a few points that I'd like to point out.

First, you gave no physical character description, so we don't know what the characters look like. As for their personalities, Haeyoung seems dramatic, but Jimin... he has no personality. He seems like a nice guy, but that's it. We have nothing on him. Maybe it's because we don't know his personality or anything about him, I felt no connection between the characters. We only got to read about their first meeting. I would loved to read about their relationship now, so that I can see the emotional connections between the characters.

Also majority of the story is from Haeyoung's POV, but suddenly Jimin's popped up out of nowhere. It was random and confusing. Great, we know he likes her too, but it takes away from the story. Not only is it confusing, but it takes away from your dramatic cliff hanger. Haeyoung is so worried about getting rejected, but when we learn that Jimin likes her too it's like case closed. We don't need to read the confession because we already know he's going to say yes. I'd rather read about him randomly kissing her and accepting her confession, feeling the relief at the same time as Haeyoung.

Lastly, I couldn't understand who was speaking. You tried to give details on who was speaking, but because all the dialogue was in the same paragraph, it was confusing. I thought Jimin was confessing when it was Haeyoung. Also at the end I think Jimin was asking her why she was crying, but I thought Haeyoung was asking herself that because of the way it was written. The dialogue was confusing.

Overall, I liked the descriptions and details in the story. I also liked the drama, but I did feel it was too much for a oneshot confession. Drama would suit novels better. Anyways, I can't wait to read your next story. I think the next prompt, Royalty AU... I believe, might be a better match for your writing style based on this oneshot. I can't wait to read it.
upgrader #2
Chapter 1: This was cute! It was funny when Haeyoung started to cry after Jimin also confessed. I did like that the story was short and sweet but I think that more time should have been spent introducing us to Haeyoung. With OCs it's important to have more character description since most fans don't have general knowledge of their personality and characteristics the way we do of idols. I also think that more could have been done to flesh out Jimin - is he in charge of facilities? Who is he? There's also no mention of their actual friendship other than that flashback, which would have been nice so the reader could feel more invested in the relationship. Overall, it was a cute and fluffy story which fits what you were going for! :)
Yoshinon #3
Chapter 1: Ah, to be young and in love...this story reminded me that it could at the same time be the best feeling ever and the worst feeling ever. Best because of the person you like, worst because of the possibility of rejection and ruining a good friendship.
I like your writing because it didn't feel like anything was lacking. Almost everything was clear to the reader.
I enjoyed reading this story. Good job :)
WinterCeeli #4
Chapter 1: This is really nice :)
amusingmurdermachine #5
Chapter 1: This was nicely done :) You got most of the story elements just like heclgehog said below, so good job on that :)

One thing I noticed in the foreword though was the line "Three years ago today, she fell for him" which might have been some sort of typo?
heclgehog #6
Chapter 1: This was done so well. Like its so short word count wise yet it has back story, conflict, character development. Nice nice nice. Plus it was adorable, obviously! For such a short fast paced story with only a few scenes, you did well with description and setting. Even though you didn't show many physical attributes of the characters it didn't take anyway from the story too much. Just a quick sweet little one shot~
asahdako #7
Chapter 1: Hmmmm...nice fic *gives thumbs-up*
taempteng #8
Chapter 1: I don't read xOC fics, so this is a first, so-
Congrats? I guess, for being the first? X'D
Okay, sorry, forget I ever said any of that
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I can't help but to laugh when Haeyoung cried again after Jimin confessed that he likes her too. X'D It's so cute whenever a guy gets panicky when a girl suddenly starts crying out of nowhere.

I don't really have much to say, so, yeah-
This is a nice fic, me likey. :D
Charlot1081 769 streak #9
Chapter 1: I'm wondering why Jimin was the one to close the school at midnight. It's really hard to confess your feelings to someone. I think your story reached the level of some readers that are having a hard time. Sometimes it takes a little while to say something, other times it takes years. But some people wait years, and miss the opportunity completely. They may have given up their love for each other and would have never known what it would be like if they did tell each other their feelings.
Cute story! Good luck with your future stories! ^,-
tereselovlien #10
Chapter 1: A cute story I enjoyed. My heart fluttered every time Jimin's name was written hahah.
I like your writing, though it could be a bit more describable when it came to addressing the characters instead of just using their names over and over again. But a cute and fluffy one-shot that made me smile and think of the time I once liked someone years back. I enjoyed this story of yours~~ xx
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