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With Whom Do I REALLY want to BE...?
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Requested by: Haniismiling
Reviewer: dubumints
Story: With who I REALLY want to BE...?
Title : 2/5
Okay, the reason why I gave your title this score is because it's not very catchy and it's gramatically incorrect. If you want to attract more readers, a proper title would be better. Although I do know what you're trying to convey, it will be better if you fix it :D
Try these (It's the same title but I just fixed the grammar):
- With Whom Do I REALLY Want to be with?
- Who Do I Really Wanna be with?
Some titles that would probably match your story:
- Sorry Oppa, He's the one I really want to be with~
- Oh no! I Love the Guy I Hate!
These are all just suggestions of course! ^_^ You may keep the title you have right now but I strongly suggest you fix the grammar. ;)
PS. I selected those titles because your story has a cute, romcom theme to it.
Description/Foreword: 3/5
This part was okay and it properly gave your readers a glimpse of what your story is about. Although I strongly suggest that you switch your foreword with your description.
Basically, your description should contain your catchphrase, (an attention- getter for the readers) your author's note, your trailer, your character list/chart, your credits and your disclaimer/copyright. (if you have any)
Your foreword should contain the excerpts you made for each character. For example, the talk snippet of Suzy and IU, the conversation of Yoseob and Wooyoung and all that jazz. :)
Thumbs up for the pictures though. They totally fit with what was going on! ;)
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