Title (10/10)

I really liked this title. It suits the story very well since the entire story is, in fact, about a parting at the witching hour and it was very eye-catching to me. You really made a great choice; I was interested to read this story from the title alone!

 Plot (30/35)

       Originality (3.5/5)

The thing I found interesting about this story is that most of it happened to be strictly dialogue. It is not easy to have a plot that is driven only by conversations (e.g. Before Sunrise) or focusing only on descriptions (e.g. Butterfly Girl) but when done well, I find it to be quite romantic. The idea is certainly heard of so it is not completely original anymore but since not many are brave enough to attempt to write this way, I think that it can still be considered quite innovative.

       Believability (9/10)

I can’t help but feel that, realistically speaking, it would take more than a soliloquy one night for a person to get over the loss of a loved one. On the other hand, whether or not one believes in ghosts and whatnot, I think you did a great job at making this story pretty believable. It was nice that Tiffany and Taeyeon were seemingly having an ordinary conversation together despite the fact that Tiffany did not know of Taeyeon’s presence. Although a part of me wished that Tiffany could see and hear Taeyeon, it was this factor that made the story believable so well done for that!

       Narration (9/10)

Most of the story happened to be dialogue however, from what I could gather, your narration is beyond satisfactory. I thoroughly enjoyed the description in the opening and at the ending. What I think you could work on is the way you detail the characters’ traits and movements – your wording was rather strange at times and you sometimes mentioned things that were unnecessary such as “Taeyeon’s baby-like face was wet with tears”. I did touch up this sentence previously but I do feel that there wasn’t a need to state that her face is “baby-like”. It stuck out to me like a sore thumb upon first read and didn’t match the serious and emotional tone of the story.

       Setting (8.5/10)

You provide plenty of details in your descriptions and I was certainly able to paint a strong mental picture of the entire scene. However, what I’m looking for is a balance. You gave too mu