Story title: ♔♔

I liked the title, but it's really simple and reveals nothing about the story. 'I'll Be' doesn't really fit with the story either.

Story poster/background: ♔♔♔♔♔

Omo! It was really pretty~! I'm wondering if you made it yourself, and if so I'm impressed. It's very pretty~! Having the background match was a great bonus for the look of the story page, good job!

Foreword/Description: ♔♔♔♔

The description was vague, but enough to sound interesting, so props for you. And the poem in the foreword was rather pretty. I'm only making a crown off because a little bit of the phrasing is awkward. I'm not sure if you got it somewhere and translated it, or what, but “You made me kneeling in your heart And couldn't be separated from your love” was a little awkward for me to read.

The fact that your review list is inconspicuous and out of the way is a nice, as some are glaringly obvious and looks bad. But yours is nice, so good job!

Characters: ♔♔

Since it was a one shot, there wasn't a lot of time for character development, so it's understandable. But, there were parts of Jiyeon's personality that could have been explained more. Since it was in Baekhyun's point of view, this is also understandable. But, at least in my opinion, a one shot is a little better when you get to know as much of the character as possible with the little amount of time you have to read it.

In, in that aspect, Baekhyun could have asked a few more questions about why her parents are so...however they are, and why she had decided to study abroad. Baekhyun as well could have been explained a little more. Like, why he was out so late in the first place, where he always went while waiting for Jiyeon to show up at the park. I find little details like this to add to the story to make it more interesting to read and get to know the character.

Originality: ♔♔♔

Though I haven't read a story exactly like this before, it is a rather common plot device to have a character stumble upon a beauty who isn't paying attention as they're absorbed in an activity they are passionate about and become entranced. Also to be too nervous to approach for the longest time.

And when Baekhyun did finally approach her, especially with her ominous comment 'It's my last night playing here', it wasn't hard to predict where the story was going from that point. Although, I did like how they had a proper ending instead of him going to the house (or park) a couple days later and not being able to find her.

At least they had a proper goodbye, so I liked that part.

Flow: ♔♔♔♔

For being a oneshot, the flow was just fine, and it didn't leave me wondering how it got to certain points, but I have to admit it could have gone a little slower in order to explain Baekhyun's developing feelings for Jinyeon and her music, and thoughts on her playing other than the piece was amazing and she had a nice voice.

Grammer, Spelling etc: ♔♔♔♔

Since there is no mention of you having English as your second language, I'm grading you as if it is your native language. Which, I'm guessing it is because as far as spelling and grammar mistakes, I didn't notice many. A couple of the sentences are oddly phrased, but still understandable. In fact, it kind of fits with the story as sometimes, when nervous, our own minds don't even make a lot of grammatical sense.

Bonus: ♔♔

(Is the character your bias? Makes you have a feeling that you want to know what happen next. Storyline is to your liking and etc)

Not going to lie, the story left me wanting for more. Is Baekhyun ever going to see Jiyeon again, will they exchange numbers? It was kind of sad to see the story go, as I was really curious as to how their relationship would develop, or just end, but the ending was realistic for having just formally met the person, so I gave you an extra bonus point for that.

Total: ♔♔♔

Three crowns~! Good job!