But No Problem, I Kill

Story by dhaatk
Reviewed by jrose94

Title - 10/10
I found your title intriguing and mysterious.

Story Description & Foreword - 8/10
I liked how your description was short and to the point, but I felt that it was a little misleading. I did like how you included a short part as to how you were inspired to write about him and what had influenced your story.
 

Graphics - 5/5
Your poster looks beautiful. I love it! It helps add to the mysterious and dark feeling of the story.

Grammar & Sentence Structure - 9/10
Your grammar was great! I saw very few mistakes throughout the story. I thought that you did very nicely with the dialogue, as well. I was very impressed.

Vocabulary, Punctuation, & Spelling - 10/10
I thought you used good vocabulary, and I didn't see a lot of issues with the punctuation. Your spelling was also really good. Great job.

Story Plot & Development - 18/20
Even though your story was short, you did a great job with developing the plot. I was able to understand everything easily. I also liked how you gave a lot of detail when you were describing Yoongi's situation.
 

Characterization - 10/10
I felt several emotions for Yoongi when I was reading. You did an awesome job with helping the reader understand and relate to him. For such a short story, his character was very well developed.

Creativity - 9/10
Though the genre of self abuse has been used quite a bit, I thought you did a good job in making the story differentiate from others.

Reader’s Overall Enjoyment - 14/15
I really liked your story! Even though the ending was sad and a little unexpected, the story was very emotional and pulled at the heartstrings. You did a great job!

Total point : 93/100
Grade A

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