The Flower That Brings Death

Story by Terrachipzx
Reviewed by YoseobiesLover

Title - 9/10
Angsty. Makes sense for your story.

Story Description & Foreword - 7/10
A little bare, but it is enough to draw readers in. Extra point for the Death Note bit. One of my fav animes!

Graphics - 5/5
It has a creepy and alone feel to it, and I noticed that you continued with that theme for all of your pictures, so nice job on that!

Grammar & Sentence Structure - 4/10
You have fine grammar, but your dialogue sentence structures get a bit repetitive. Try switching things up and not always starting out with the description of what the character is doing and then the dialogue.

Vocabulary, Punctuation, & Spelling - 10/10
Fine. Nothing to be said.

Story Plot & Development - 17/20
As you are only showing the prologue part, I don’t really have a sense of what is going on. But so far, it is pretty good. Taeyeon seems like a caring person, and Baek is like a puppy, so I’m not complaining.

Characterization - 9/10
Awesome job with everyone! It was cool to see all of our original ideas of our idols blown away. But try not to make everyone a , okay? Cause almost everyone we have seen is a lot of a . Add in some more nice people.

Creativity - 4/10
It is a really awesome plot line, and it leaves the readers curious, but I have seen something like this plot pretty often.

Reader’s Overall Enjoyment - 14/15
Overall I like where your story is going, descriptive enough to be interesting, and I like how you move at a faster pace and you don’t have dull spots. I don’t think you need to change much, besides adding some different styles in for your sentence patterns. Good luck!

Total point : 84/100
Grade B+

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